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The Saturday Slash

  Posted by bigblackcat97 , 01 December 2012 · 177 views

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We all know the first line of a query is your "hook." I call the last line the "sinker." You want it to punch them in the face, in a nice, friendly kind of way that makes them unable to forget you after having read the 300 other queries in their inbox.






















Also, for my brave Saturday Slash volunteers I will gladly do follow-up slashes (each more kindly than the next) on your query if you post them on the Query Critique board over on [url="http://www.agentqueryconnect.com/"]AgentQuery Connect[/url]. You'll get advice from me, and also people who are smarter than me. If you do post on AQ, be sure to follow the guidelines and let me know you posted so that I can follow up!


Justin and his brother Tom share one life: They feel each other's physical pain and emotions. [color=#6aa84f]Are they twins? I feel like if they were that would be mentioned here. Also, I'm getting no indication of genre here, this could be anything from contemporary to hardcore SF. It's not *imperative* that we get the feel right off, but it helps. This is definitely something that makes your concept original, but the hook itself needs more spice.[/color]

At thirteen, Justin gets [color=#6aa84f]phrasing - "is shot"[/color] shot with a poisoned arrow. In a last attempt to save his life, a healer works dangerous magic to forever link him to Tom. [color=#6aa84f]OK - so this is a step backward in time from the hook, right? The hook is a statement of their linked status, but this is telling us how the link happened, so there's some confusion here. Also, the poisoned arrow, healer, and magic tells us more about genre, so get the "how" of the linking up with the fact of the linking with your hook.[/color] But living with the constant echo of someone else's feelings isn't easy, especially when Justin knows Tom can't stand him. [color=#6aa84f]Even better - forever linked and they hate each other? There's your hook.[/color]

As farm hands, the brothers both want more from life than hauling grain and shoveling manure. After Justin finds out his father has lied to him his whole life [color=#6aa84f]about what? The price of tea in China?[/color], the brothers run off to join the military. When the brothers become soldiers in a global war, they must learn to work together because their bond makes them vulnerable. [color=#6aa84f]Oh, nice twist here.[/color] If one dies, the other will too. But it also makes them powerful. They can bend elements to their will, sending waves of scorching hot flames, shards of ice, and bolts of lightning upon their enemies, [color=#6aa84f]How does this bond give them special superhero powers? Is it residual magic at work?[/color] who counter with blurring speed and a taste for torture.

Years of war leave the brothers exhausted. Neither side is winning, people are starving, and the ground is covered in blood. Justin and Tom will do anything to stop the war, and they might just be their country's last hope, because of the one thing they never wanted. Their bond. [color=#6aa84f]Decent sinker here, but how does their bond and super powers make them so special? It sounds like magic is fairly common in this world, so what's so special about them? Exactly how can this bond make or break the war?[/color]

[color=#6aa84f]You've got an original concept here, and overall the query is pretty good. You need to address the timeline issues and get the idea of them not liking each other up into the hook. That's your hook - bonded to someone you hate, not just the bonding itself. Also, I need to know more about this war. I get that the main idea of the story isn't necessarily the war, but I think an idea of Who and Why are very important in the query. Otherwise, it just sounds like the war only serves as as backdrop for the brother's story. And yes, that might be the case, but right now the war doesn't sound fully fleshed out because of the wording of the query. Tell us who is fighting, and why, otherwise the reader has nothing riding on hoping that a war ends if they've got nothing invested in it, plotwise.[/color]

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Fun on Friday

  Posted by bigblackcat97 , 30 November 2012 · 140 views

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Thursday Thoughts

  Posted by bigblackcat97 , 29 November 2012 · 116 views

Thoughts lately...


1) Setting up a Christmas tree is just annoying as hell. If I *don't* set one up, I feel guilty and unsociable. If I *do* set one up it hangs out too long after the fact and I feel guilty for not putting it away sooner. My record for taking down tree late? Mid-March, 2004.


2) I'm sure Jesus loves that this is what I'm focusing on at Christmastime.


3) On the other hand, there's a lot of debate among biblical scholars about when Jesus was [url="http://www.msnbc.msn.com/id/9994612/ns/dateline_nbc/t/inside-dateline-journey-back-time/#.ULdweKX5i4k"]actually born[/url]. Some push for as late as April. Technically, Jesus might be totally thrilled with me for having that tree up in the spring.
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A Cover Reveal Talk with J.R. Johansson, author of INSOMNIA - and an ARC Giveaway!

  Posted by bigblackcat97 , 27 November 2012 · 244 views

Todays guest for the CRAP (Cover Reveal Anxiety Phase) is my fellow Friday the Thirteener J.R. Johansson, author of [url="http://www.goodreads.com/book/show/12260608-insomnia"]INSOMNIA[/url]. Jenn is offering up an awesome prize pack to go along with her insomnia theme, as well as an ARC once they're available!


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[i]It’s been four years since I slept, and I suspect it is killing me.[/i]

[i]Instead of sleeping, Parker Chipp enters the dream of the last person he’s had eye contact with. He spends his nights crushed by other people’s fear and pain, by their disturbing secrets—and Parker can never have dreams of his own. The severe exhaustion is crippling him. If nothing changes, Parker could soon be facing psychosis and even death.[/i]

[i]Then he meets Mia. Her dreams, calm and beautifully uncomplicated, allow him blissful rest that is utterly addictive. Parker starts going to bizarre lengths to catch Mia’s eye every day. Everyone at school thinks he’s gone over the edge, even his best friend. And when Mia is threatened by a true stalker, everyone thinks it’s Parker.[/i]

[i]Suffering blackouts, Parker begins to wonder if he is turning into someone dangerous. What if the monster stalking Mia is him after all?[/i]

[b]Did you have any pre-conceived notions about what you wanted your cover to look like?[/b]

Not really. It was more of a feel that I wanted. I wanted it to look creepy, but still cool/compelling/interesting. I wanted something that would convey the feel of the book and draw people in at the same time. I think they did a great job with accomplishing that.

[b]How far in advance from your pub date did you start talking covers with your house?[/b]

It was in July, so about 11 months before my pub date.

[b]Did you have any input on your cover?[/b]

A little, but not much. On the first version, his face had much smoother skin and I asked for them to make him a little more masculine and rough. They did a great job with that.

[b]How was your cover revealed to you?[/b]

Haha, my editor sent me an email with the subject line, “OK, brace yourself” I think the cover is a little shocking at first glance, so it was oddly appropriate.

[b]Was there an official "cover reveal" date for your art?[/b]

No, my editor told me that once I had my final copy I could set up the reveal when/how I wanted. He doesn’t know yet that I can’t be trusted with that kind of freedom. ;-)

[b]How far in advance of the reveal date were you aware of what your cover would look like?[/b]

I just saw the first version of it near the end of October, so I guess almost eight and a half months.

[b]Was it hard to keep it to yourself before the official release?[/b]

Yes and no. It’s been fun to show family and close friends, but I kind of liked keeping it private for a bit. Now I’m really excited to have it out there for everyone to see. I love it and am happy to have it out there representing me and my book.

[b]What surprised you most about the process?[/b]

How fast it went from the first version to the final product. I know it isn’t that way with every author/publisher, but for me it was super fast. The publisher had a meeting first. I guess they had a few different cover options to consider, but their vote was unanimous on this one so I never saw the others. Once they gave it to me, I gave some feedback, they made a couple of changes and got the final back to me less than a week later.

[b]Any advice to other debut authors about how to handle cover art anxiety?[/b]

My advice is to realize that every cover has people who love it and people who hate it. Yours won’t be any different, so don’t expect it to be. It won’t (hopefully) be the last cover you have, so learn from the experience. The author doesn’t have a lot of control or power most of the time, so make sure your opinion is known, your voice is heard, and then sit back and try to enjoy the ride.

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My Heroes Have Always Been Anti-Heroes

  Posted by bigblackcat97 , 25 November 2012 · 225 views

If you've been following my tweets you know that I'm re-watching LOST and because of that I've now lost interest in the real world. LOST is one of those shows that is so well written, acted, paced, plotted and executed that it worms into your brain and eats away that part of you that allows you to be entertained by mediocrity. Now I want nothing except LOST.

That being said, The Walking Dead is on tonight, and you can bet your ass I'll be watching.

And those two things side by side brought me to a realization. As a writer, reader and overall storyaholic, I love the anti-heroes - those complex, warped fellows that find themselves unable to fit into social situations. They'd rather make up insulting nicknames for people or throw squirrels at them than actually participate in a helpful way.

The first thing we see Sawyer do in LOST is smoke a cigarette and glare at people. When he finally does get social it's to accuse Sayid of being a terrorist and get into a fistfight with him. And thank God Jack broke that up early because it would've been a shame if Sayid had to break Sawyer's neck with his ankles.

Our first exposure to Daryl is when he comes lunging out of the brush, completely filthy and armed to the teeth, pissed off that a zombie got the deer he's been tracking... and then he throws dead squirrels at people and makes racist comments.

Yes, these are my heroes. Aggressive rednecks.

So why are they so much more compelling than the real heroes?

Because Jack and Rick are good, clean-cut people thrown into bad situations where they begin to deteriorate. Rick is killing the living and getting phone calls from heaven, Jack ends up strung out and makes a pretty crappy husband / boyfriend. These transformations happen after they go down the rabbit hole and their personalities get a reality check. My anti-heroes grow after the world falls apart.

In "Two for the Road" (LOST S2 E20) after Libby dies, Kate is crouching on a bench in the hatch attempting to hide her tears. Sawyer more or less forces his comfort on her with a sweet man-friend chest-pillow hug and I'm like "DEAR GOD I WISH YOU REALLY EXISTED TAKE ME HOME." And Sawyer just gets better from there. He reads (YA, no less), he plays ping-pong, and he threatens people who threaten Kate. Also, he sports a half-ponytail every now and then and it's super hot.

And then he backslides. I've never been so upset as when Sawyer stockpiled weapons and declared there was a new sheriff in town. OK, I have been, but you know what I mean.

Daryl is like Sawyer (minus aggressive sexual manipulation of every attractive female he meets) in that the worst possible situation is bringing out the best in him. He's stopped throwing squirrels at people. Now he's feeding everyone with his bow. He's a team player and Rick's right hand man, (although I'd argue that Daryl is more important to their survival than Rick but *anyway*) he may even have feelings for Carol down under that filthy skin. And the equivalent of Sawyer's man-friend chest-pillow hug was the cuddling and christening of Baby Kickass. Yeah, even my tin can of a heart rattled around a little.

But I sense a backslide coming as his path converges with his brother's. I'm actually worried about this and have a feeling I'm going to be shouting obscenities at my TV sometime soon.

And these are the kind of characters that I love - the ones that you worry about. Creating a character that keeps people waiting for the next episode or forcing themselves to stay awake for just one more chapter because they need to know what's going to happen to him/her is a true art.

We're writers. Our job is to make readers care about things that never happened to people that don't exist. It's not easy, but it's doable.

I don't know if I'll ever be able to make characters as compelling and complex as Sawyer and Daryl, but I promise you I'll try.
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Thursday Thoughts

  Posted by bigblackcat97 , 22 November 2012 · 214 views

Thoughts lately -

1) When I was little I used to think that the world ended when we ran out of space to bury people. Think about it - there's a lot of people and only so much soil. Surely there's a formula to mathematically figure out when the entire earth will be tombstones. And yes, I'm aware you can be cremated. But you can also be [url="http://www.amazon.com/Stiff-Curious-Lives-Human-Cadavers/dp/0393324826/ref=sr_1_1?ie=UTF8&qid=1353434999&sr=8-1&keywords=stiff+roach"]composted[/url], if you live in Scandinavia. Yep.

2) But you can't be buried on your own property, that's illegal because of water tables and such. Gone are the good old days of being hauled out to the family plot. This is odd to me. It's my body, but I don't get to say where I want it to go when I'm done with it. I'm pretty sure I'm not allowed to do the thing where you are stuck up on a plank in a tree and the birdies get you. Will check on that.

3) It makes me think about placentas. You don't get to keep yours. Yep - that's right. You grew it inside of yourself, you expelled it out of your vagina but it does not belong to you. Because there's a .0000001 chance I might take it home and do stem cell experiments.
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An SAT with Laura Barnes & Querying Without Fear

  Posted by bigblackcat97 , 20 November 2012 · 186 views

Today's guest for the SAT (Successful Author Talk) is Laura Barnes, a great person who definitely deserves the light at the end of the slog tunnel. Laura's story is one of those that makes you say, "Yes, I can do this! Good stuff happens to regular people too, not just the insane ones like Mindy!"


[b]Writing Process:[/b]
[b]Are you a Planner or Pantster?[/b]


I like to pretend I’m a Planster because I admire people who write on the fly and I think Planners are boring, but I’m really a Planner. I like to call it mulling. I mull and mull and mull – as I’m driving, as I’m falling asleep, in the shower – and then when I sit at the computer it’s ready to go. I also generally write an outline near the beginning of writing.


[b]How long does it typically take you to write a novel, start to finish?[/b]


About four months. I’m hoping to finish my current W.I.P. in three months though. Fingers crossed.


[b]Do you work on one project at a time, or are you a multi tasker?[/b]


One at a time. I have a feeling I’m going to have to learn to multi-task since I have a lot of material on submission/getting ready for submission. I’m not looking forward to it.


[b]Did you have to overcome any fears that first time you sat down to write?[/b]


Not really. I say that because I can’t remember the first time I sat down to write – I’ve always been a writer. I do have recurrent doubts though. Days when I think everything is shit, and not in a submission hell way, but in a why does everything I write make me want a puke kind of way.


[b]How many trunked books did you have before you were agented?[/b]


When I got my agent, I had three complete books and had considered at least one of those to be trunked (my first one). However, it appears that all three of my books will be put out on submission after some revisions.


[b]Have you ever quit on an ms, and how did you know it was time?[/b]


I’ve started a few that are waiting for me to return. Does that count as quitting? The ms that I had considered trunked I gave up on because I had queried, like, 150 agents and though I had a lot of requests, no one took me up on it. I quit querying it when my next book was finished, mostly because I was more excited about the new one then the old one.


[b]Querying and Agent Hunt Process:[/b]
[b] Who is your agent and how did you get that "Yes!" out of them? [/b]


My agent is Bob Diforio at D4EO literary agency. He usually only accepts referrals, but I queried him anyway since I love his agency. He asked for the full the same day I queried him and offered representation the next morning. I’m also working with Kristin Miller, another agent at D4EO, for my MG novels.


[b]How long did you query before landing your agent?[/b]


I’d queried my first two books for over a year, but I’d only been querying the book that landed me an agent for one week.


[b]Any advice to aspiring writers out there on conquering query hell?[/b]


Ha ha. I laugh because every bit of advice I read when querying made me bitter. But that’s probably just me. So I’ll say this: querying sucks. It sucks mostly because we let the results of querying tell us how good our writing is, which is total bull crap. A lot of getting an agent is being in the right place at the right time when whatever particular agent was in the right mood. Don’t let rejection tell you you’re not good.


[b]Social Networking and Marketing:[/b]
[b]How much of your own marketing do you? [/b]


I have a [url="http://laurabwriter.blogspot.com/"]blog[/url] that has been ignored a lot this last year. I was hard core blogging for a long time. Then more real life responsibilities (ie: working more) forced me to have to back down. I have a [url="https://twitter.com/LaaBWriter"]Twitter [/url]account but I really don’t use it much.
[b]When do you build your platform? After an agent? Or should you be working before?[/b]


Before! Before, before, before because after you get your agent you’re busy. If you’ve got things in place before, it will be much better to maintain.


[b]Do you think social media helps build your readership?[/b]


I do. I’m not sure if it’s enough to counter the amount of time spent on it, but I believe the relationships built through social media are valuable for other reasons as well.
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A Comfy Corner In My Brain

  Posted by bigblackcat97 , 19 November 2012 · 178 views

I know some writers who say that when the ideas are coming they come so hard and fast they can't type quick enough. I have those experiences at times, and I'm very grateful for them when they come - except for those 2 AM diatribes. My muse could stand some Lunesta.


But my experience when I'm actually writing, or even just daydreaming (I call that plotting) is that my brain actually feels s-l-o-w-e-d d-o-w-n. I'm sure that my eyes glaze over and a little white fade-out effect takes over whatever room I happen to be in at the time, as well.


There's a literal feeling of settling in a corner of my brain, like the WIP's ass just found an awesome chair with a perfect-fit buttmark and tossed itself down. It gets settled, curls up (don't quote me on this, but it might be purring) and that's when the real act of writing starts happening.


It's typically about two pages in to that day's work, those two pages will need a lot of assistance and a Crap Removal Team when the time comes. I feel like the idea is walking around my head, testing different areas while I toss out the requisite two pages of drivel, trying out chairs and dismissing them.


But once it finds that buttmark chair... we're in business.
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The Saturday Slash

  Posted by bigblackcat97 , 17 November 2012 · 228 views

Meet my Hatchet of Death (or, some other colorful description <a href="http://crossingthehelix.blogspot.com/" target="_blank">RC Lewis</a> and I come up with at any given moment). This is how I edit myself, it is how I edit others. 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I call the last line the "sinker." You want it to punch  them in the face, in a nice, friendly kind of way that makes them unable to forget you after having read the 300 other queries in their inbox.</div></div></div></div></div></div></div></div></div></div><div style="margin: 0px;"><div style="margin: 0px;"><div style="margin: 0px;"><div style="margin: 0px;"><div style="margin: 0px;"><div style="margin: 0px;"><div style="margin: 0px;"><div style="margin: 0px;"><div style="margin: 0px;"><div style="margin: 0px;"><div style="margin: 0px;"><br /></div></div></div></div></div></div></div></div></div></div></div><div style="margin: 0px;"><div style="margin: 0px;"><div style="margin: 0px;"><div style="margin: 0px;"><div style="margin: 0px;"><div style="margin: 0px;"><div style="margin: 0px;"><div style="margin: 0px;"><div style="margin: 0px;"><div style="margin: 0px;"><div style="margin: 0px;">Also, for my brave Saturday Slash volunteers I will gladly do follow-up slashes (each more kindly than the next) on your query if you post them on the Query Critique board over on <a href="http://www.agentqueryconnect.com/" target="_blank">AgentQuery Connect</a>. You'll get advice from me, and also people who are smarter than me. If you do post on AQ, be sure to follow the guidelines and let me know you posted so that I can follow up!<br /><br /></div></div></div></div></div></div></div></div></div></div></div>Seventeen-year-old Mason Greer wasn’t always stoked about becoming a Waker—a protector of those who can change the future with their dreams. <span style="color: #6aa84f;">This isn't quite working because you're trying to jam the information about what a Waker is in here. Plus, we've got the whole "he wasn't always stoked," which says that *now* he is, but we don't know what changed that feeling until the end of this par</span>a It was something he was born into. But six years ago <span style="color: #6aa84f;">Also, I feel like this change to being "stoked" should be relatively recent, the way you're phrasing it in your hook. But it was actually an event six years ago that changed his mind </span>Mason received mysterious boxes <span style="color: #6aa84f;">random information: I read this as "mysterious boxers" which really had me wondering </span>at his father’s work place. Inside Mason found things he will never forget—body parts of a Dreamer. <span style="color: #6aa84f;">Ba BA BUM - here's your hook. Down here. Get these body parts in the first sentence. </span>Who? He’ll never know, but he’ll be damned if it happens again. <span style="color: #6aa84f;">Nice - these body parts gave him the conviction. Great! Get that up there. He used to be so-so on the topic? So what? That's not a hook. </span><br /><div><br /></div><div>Now on assignment for the first time, Mason knows what he has to do: find the Dreamer <span style="color: #6aa84f;">wait - what Dreamer? Surely not the one whose body parts he got in a box six years ago? Because that wouldn't quite make sense...,</span> save the world, become a hero. Easy, right? Sure, until he meets seventeen-year-old Avery Carmichael, who, according to his records, should be a boy. <span style="color: #6aa84f;">Nice -  I like the twist here.</span></div><div><br /></div><div>Avery makes Mason’s job anything but simple. Haunted by her past, she lives in fear that the people who took her parents will come for her next. <span style="color: #6aa84f;">So the body parts were / was one of her parents?</span> So when Mason shows up and tells her she’s not crazy <span style="color: #6aa84f;">I'd strike this</span> , that her dreams really are coming to life, she’s not sure what to believe. But her inability to control her gift brings the Dream Catchers closer and the duo must learn to work together—despite their growing feeling <span style="color: #6aa84f;">why would that be a block? I would think growing feelings for each other would make it easier to work together</span>—to avoid them. If this group catches a Dreamer like Avery, or as legends call her a Chavez—one who can completely control their dreams—<span style="color: #6aa84f;"> I'd strike the information here after "Avery" it's making everything choppy. I like the idea of a "living nightmare," great sinker</span> they’ll use her power to change the world into a living nightmare.</div><div><br /></div><div>Narrated alternately by Mason and Avery, DREAM MAKER, a YA speculative fiction novel, is complete at 60,000 words and on multiple submission. <span style="color: #6aa84f;">I wouldn't worry about specifying multiple submission - they assume that.</span></div><div><br /></div><div><span style="color: #6aa84f;">Overall this is looking pretty good. You're trying overly hard to get your world building jammed into parenthetical phrases here and it's not absolutely necessary. Cut out some of your excess and get that body box into the first line and you're looking much better.</span></div><div class="blogger-post-footer"><img width='1' height='1' src='https://blogger.googleusercontent.com/tracker/121295651954516717-6664218036958843516?l=writerwriterpantsonfire.blogspot.com' alt='' /></div>

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  Posted by bigblackcat97 , 16 November 2012 · 219 views

It looks like I'm making it a habit of not reading and writing Book Talks to share with you guys, and instead I'm posting YouTube videos. At least this one is of a writerly bent.




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