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#1 Lori Sjoberg

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Posted 15 November 2012 - 06:54 PM

Here's the query that resulted in my contract with Kensington publishing. Grave Intentions is scheduled for release on January 3, 2013.
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Lifelong skeptic Sarah Griffith doesn’t believe in ghosts, or ghouls, or things that go bump in the night. Imagine her surprise when she discovers her next-door neighbor is Death Incarnate.

David Anderson is a Reaper, a damned soul given one final chance to earn his salvation by harvesting the souls of the recently departed. Sixty years on the job have left him burned out and emotionally dead – that is, until he meets Sarah.

An analytical scientist, Sarah lives in constant fear of her own family history. Her late mother was diagnosed schizophrenic while her grandmother still swears she can see dead people. When Sarah witnesses David collecting a soul, she’s confronted with the reality that her family doesn’t suffer from mental illness, but is actually gifted with a connection to the spirit world.

While David helps Sarah adapt to her changing reality, Sarah breathes new life onto the dying embers of David’s humanity, sparking a passion he never dreamed possible. When he learns that Sarah is slated to die, he alters the fabric of destiny in order to save her life. Fate, enraged with this blatant act of insubordination, gives David a choice: deliver the soul of Sarah Griffith, or surrender his own.

GRAVE INTENTIONS is a completed 91,000 word paranormal romance that recently placed second in the 2011 Touch of Magic Contest. With your interest in urban fantasy and paranormal romance, I believe you and your agency would be ideal for representing this project. I’m a member of the Romance Writers of America and the Central Florida Romance Writers. Thank you for your time and consideration.

#2 LucidDreamer

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Posted 15 November 2012 - 06:57 PM

And it certainly is an excellent query -- the book sounds awesome, too!

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Posted 15 November 2012 - 07:12 PM

Congrats!!!!

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WHO'S THE MOST POPULAR OF THEM ALL? (upper MG contemporary) -- shelved

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#4 Roonil Wazlib

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Posted 15 November 2012 - 09:15 PM

Wow, sounds awsome!!

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#5 Jemi

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Posted 15 November 2012 - 09:16 PM

That's awesome!!! Congrats :biggrin: :biggrin:

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Posted 15 November 2012 - 10:50 PM

Very intriguing. The query flows really well. Congrats!
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Posted 15 November 2012 - 11:32 PM

Way ta GO, Lori!!

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Posted 16 November 2012 - 12:07 AM

Love the sinker at the end! Sounds like a fun read. Wooot!

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Posted 16 November 2012 - 01:04 AM

Congratulations! I'm so excited for you-- and that query was fantastic!

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Posted 16 November 2012 - 09:50 AM

Love the sinker at the end! Sounds like a fun read. Wooot!


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#11 Lori Sjoberg

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Posted 16 November 2012 - 11:02 AM

Thanks, y'all! :smile:

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Posted 16 November 2012 - 11:55 AM

Dynamite! And Jan 3, 2013 is only a few weeks away! Adding to my must-read list.
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Posted 16 November 2012 - 03:33 PM

I've got to get this book! A great query letter...well done and congratulations!

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Posted 16 November 2012 - 04:05 PM

Great example of a kickass query. Congratulations!!

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Posted 16 November 2012 - 07:27 PM

I've got my copy ordered! Great query.

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Posted 16 November 2012 - 07:29 PM

Very nice. Congrats to you.

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Posted 16 November 2012 - 09:37 PM

WOOHOO! :D Congrats!!

#18 Lori Sjoberg

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Posted 16 November 2012 - 10:02 PM

Thanks, everyone! :smile:

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Posted 16 November 2012 - 11:41 PM

I still remember reading parts of this during Marathon. Can't WAIT to get to read the whole thing!! Your writing is so deserving! <3

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Posted 17 November 2012 - 03:10 PM

Fantastic query! I definitely want to read this when it comes out.

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