This query received its fair share of rejections but also received 3 partials, 2 fulls, and I eventually signed with Pandamoon Publishing. My book will be out around the end of Aug 13'. This is after more than 20 revisions and help from a lit agent intern as well as a query forum. www.jacksonpaulbaer.com So, here it is:
Dear Ms. xxx,
When Scott and Jessie's daughter is kidnapped, they fear the worst as all that's left behind is a pool of her blood.
Seventeen-year old Ashley Miller vanishes and her strange disappearance is quickly thought to be a homicide. Her cozy, northwest town is stunned when police find the body of another girl at the bottom of the Willamette River. The eery signature found on the girl links to a monster dubbed the Hail Mary Killer. While Scott searches for Ashley, the FBI feels convinced that she is the killer's latest victim.
In spite of three other bodies with the same distinct marking, no one prepared themselves for the discovery in southern Oregon. Local hikers stumble upon a car in the mountain brush and a tattooing needle with an evil history surfaces inside. A cabin appears nearby with another gruesome discovery. The FBI finally catches a break when they unearth the dark past of the Hail Mary Killer's family.
What emerged in his basement is more terrifying than anyone could have possibly imagined.
Complete at 80,000 words, THE EARTH BLEEDS RED is a blend of mystery and suspense fit for literary fiction. It is similar to WE WERE THE MULVANEYS by Joyce Carol Oates and INDIAN KILLER by Sherman Alexie.
I will soon be graduating with a B.A. in English and Education from Oregon State University.
Thank you for your time and consideration.