I'm a newbie, but since you shared in the agent's forum, I will try and give you some decent feedback :)
Homicide detective Natasha Damiri is investigating the murder of Janice Sinclair.Someone crucified her to the floor of her own bedroom. Janice Sinclair was crucified on her bedroom floor, and its up to Homicide Detective Natasha Damiri to find out why. (no need to mention murder since Natasha is a Homicide Detective).
Natasha discovers Senator Sinclair (who is this?) didn't bother to mention the dead girl isn't actually his daughter Janice. (This is kind of confusing, but could be rewritten like this), Suddenly, the victim's father, Senator Sinclair disappears, and Natasha must investigate the possible connection. Then he conveniently disappears.
When a single strand of hair leads Natasha to Mehdi, the
enigmatic emerging leader i n waiting of a growing cult, and now she finds her the prime suspect. in a case As she delves deeper into the case, she is led t hat leads to a tangle of murders involving ranging from a young blackmailer, and even to the President of the United States. All this and a race for power in the Middle East between three shady/devious partners are tied in to one elusive person. Janice. As a power struggle in the Middle East heats up, Natasha will discover that everything leads back to one person, the victim, Janice Sinclair.
Incur INCUR (insert genre) is a 60 000 60,000 word conspiracy thriller set in the year 2051. This is my third novel, the first has been accepted for publication and the second one, I am in the process of editing. I am editing. I write the occasional humorous article for Dawn's Sunday Images. Thank you for your time and consideration, and I l ooking look forward to hearing from you.
Yours respectfully, Sincerely,
It's hard to make accurate corrections, as your story is still a bit unclear to me, but I hope that at least some of my feedback will help. Good luck!