Newest revision in post #7
While I'm in the query trenches with my first novel, I've been revising my second novel and am ready for feedback on its query letter. Thanks in advance for your thoughts:
Sixteen-year-old Kayla thinks a mysterious road leading away from her dreadful village will be the answer to all of her problems, until a mysterious voice threatens to ruin it all.
When Kayla travels on the Mystic Road, a safe passage leading to the Ancient Hall, a school of magic, all she wants is to escape her village, where she is nothing but an oddity and an outcast. Instead, she passes an exam with flying colors and earns the rare position of Mystic apprentice. For the first time, Kayla finds a home, a select group of friends, and a magical skill at which she excels.
However, Kayla’s bliss is fleeting. She begins to hear a strange voice, luring her away from the Ancient Hall and into a mountain cave where she can learn “real magic”…whatever that means. After discovering that the owner of the voice abducted many Mystics over the years, she fights to shut the voice out, to no avail. Inundated with nightmares and disturbing visions, Kayla and her three closest friends have no choice but to face the assailant head on, or risk becoming the next in a long line of missing Mystics never to be seen again.
THE MYSTIC ROAD, a YA fantasy complete at 74,000 words, is a standalone novel with series potential.
Note: It is possible that I might adjust the age of the MC and make this a middle grade, but it's still a bit long for that. For now, I'm keeping it YA.