Some mystery is to be expected in a hook; not every last detail can be revealed in one line. However, enough can be stated that it can give an idea of the main character and plot in an interesting enough way that it keeps the agent reading into the real meat of the query.
I think yours is doing what it needs to so far.
I always like to ask three questions when trying to put together a hook:
* Who's the main character?
* What's the primary conflict?
* How's it going to get resolved?
It isn't necessary to answer the third to make a good hook, but the majority of great hooks answer at least the first two and give the agent an idea of what the book's about before they read further. They then have a pretty good basis to form an opinion of whether they want to read more.
Yours are solid so far, they're just missing some bit of punch that I can't quite put my finger on (but I also don't know your query). It might help to combine it into a one-liner and tweak the structure of it just a bit.
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