Thanks smithgirl and strangeface!
A couple of small tweaks to elminate the noted points of slight confusion. Though I think you're not weighing the "just like her classmates" porition when it comes to her difference, strangeface. It's not saying she's not a being of high intelligence, but that she thinks that's all that there was to her "just like her classmates," which is disproven when this strange men come take her and arrest her parents. Alluding to what the later sentences show. At least that's reasoning behind it.
Five-year-old Dani Redfield knows that genes are the building blocks of life. What she doesn't know is hers once belonged to an alien—one that speaks through her dreams under the guise of her gray teddy bear, Ben-Ben.
Orbiting the Earth aboard the space station Heaven's Reach, Dani believes she is a gifted student of high intelligence, just like her classmates. At least that’s what she thinks until the night scary men in armored suits break into her home. They arrest her parents and snatch her away, locking her into the chilly confines of an isolation room. There, Dani discovers that she can look through the two-way mirror in the wall, where an old woman watches her with scorn. Her icky thoughts trickle into Dani’s ears—as stinky as her cigarette’s phantom stench.
The connection lulls Dani into a trance, sending her to Ben-Ben in a dream. He tells her the old woman is Mama and Daddy's boss, and that she's the bad person behind her kidnapping. If Dani wants them back, then she has to send the wicked witch to the place where all things go for eternal sleep—the Nowhere All-Dark, Ben-Ben's home. But before Dani can summon her mind’s nighty-night wand, the old woman collapses to the floor. She drowns gurgling on her own blood—poisoned by a spy set on retrieving Dani’s reincarnated vessel intact.
Determined not to be taken from her parents again, Dani accepts playing the bait in an elaborate ruse by the CEO of her parents’ employer to draw the spy out...so she can teach his silly meat-and-bone shell what her alien powers are really like when fully bloomed.
RECODED is a 100,000 word adult social sci-fi novel told through multiple points-of-view. It also has series potential.
Quick question: Should I use "After being reunited with her parents..." instead of the "determined" line to make it clear Dani gets her parents back? I thought I could just imply it the way it is, but it does seem to cause a slip up.