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#1 17218943

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Posted 14 July 2014 - 12:17 AM

Which one of the two book covers do you like better?

 

If you come across those covers, would you want to read more about the book?

 

Any suggestions to improve the covers are greatly appreciated.

 

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Posted 14 July 2014 - 01:00 AM

The second one, 150%.



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Posted 14 July 2014 - 08:18 AM

Yep, the second one for sure. "Becomes the antagonist" really falls flat though I think. 



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Posted 14 July 2014 - 08:38 AM

The second one. I really like that one with its suggestion of movement. I'd pick it off the shelf.


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Posted 14 July 2014 - 12:17 PM

I fourth 'the second one', hands down.  The font choices are much better here as well as the overall styling.

 

 

"Becomes the antagonist" really falls flat though I think. 

 

^This right here.  That last phrase really fails to convey any mystery or challenges of the main character stepping into this story.  Does the role change her as a person?  Does it take her on a journey that presents her with a heart-wrenching choice?  Maybe it's about a sacrifice she must make or becoming a savior of the story.

 

I think just a different word or phrase to replace 'antagonist' would really spice up that line and grab the reader's attention.

 

The only other recommendation I have is for the back cover.  Somewhere below the synopsis, maybe add a url for your book or author website, twitter page, etc.  This will help your readers and fans connect directly to you. :smile:

 

Nice work on the imagery though!!


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Posted 14 July 2014 - 02:22 PM

I fourth 'the second one', hands down.  The font choices are much better here as well as the overall styling.

 

 

 

^This right here.  That last phrase really fails to convey any mystery or challenges of the main character stepping into this story.  Does the role change her as a person?  Does it take her on a journey that presents her with a heart-wrenching choice?  Maybe it's about a sacrifice she must make or becoming a savior of the story.

 

I think just a different word or phrase to replace 'antagonist' would really spice up that line and grab the reader's attention.

 

The only other recommendation I have is for the back cover.  Somewhere below the synopsis, maybe add a url for your book or author website, twitter page, etc.  This will help your readers and fans connect directly to you. :smile:

 

Nice work on the imagery though!!

 

Thank you so much for your suggestions.  I thought there's something about putting url on book covers.  I'll double-check into that, but I remember reading on amazon we're not allowed to incorporate a website address on a cover.



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Posted 15 July 2014 - 11:45 AM

Thank you so much for your suggestions.  I thought there's something about putting url on book covers.  I'll double-check into that, but I remember reading on amazon we're not allowed to incorporate a website address on a cover.

 

Ooh... I'd definitely be interested to know about the url/amazon thing.  I have a client who self-publishes with amazon and uses her site url, twitter acct, and a QR code for mobiles.  Hers are on the back cover, and Amazon usually only shows the front... so I'm wondering if it's a front-cover deal.

 

Cheers! :smile:


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Posted 15 July 2014 - 12:58 PM

Ooh... I'd definitely be interested to know about the url/amazon thing.  I have a client who self-publishes with amazon and uses her site url, twitter acct, and a QR code for mobiles.  Hers are on the back cover, and Amazon usually only shows the front... so I'm wondering if it's a front-cover deal.

 

Cheers! :smile:

 

I found a forum discussing that. It might be okay on book covers.

 

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Posted 18 September 2014 - 12:09 PM

The second one.  It's stunning.



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Posted 25 September 2014 - 07:09 PM

The second one, but I like the 'dark' and 'light' contrast of the first. 

 

About the cover blurbs, the first one is too long and wordy. Also 'heaven' and 'hell' should be capitalised as they are proper nouns.

Could you call her the heroine, instead of the antagonist? I know it sounds old fashioned, but it gives more of an idea of who she is.

Sorry to be too critical, but I think the book's title is confusing and could be improved. 

 

Good luck.

 

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