Hi everyone, so I've been getting crits on another site and trying to polish my query so it shines. Someone there, pointed me here thinking you have more of an idea on how to maximise what I've written so far.
So here it is. --------
I am seeking representation for my novel The Secret King--Lethao, a space fantasy, complete at 102,000 words.
I am a script writer with success in co-writing a web series, Best Friends, and short film, Irobe, for production company - Nandar Entertainment. In the last few years I’ve also been working with producers and directors in the United States and Australia to build my portfolio of writing, consulting, and publishing.
The Secret King is a transmedia project, which includes a 13 episode TV series, pilot script received well in the UK and graphic novel in development.
With their sun about to go supernova and their ancient enemy, the Zefron, close on their tail, Kendro, king of the Aonise, fights to save his species from total annihilation.
Using the last remaining strength and energy he has, Kendro must power their four spacecraft for lift off, a task which leaves him weak and vulnerable. Dalamaar, an Aonise traitor, makes an attempt on the King’s life, seeking the throne for himself and putting all their lives at risk.
Even as Kendro regains his strength, the Zefron strike hard and fast. Destroying one of the Aonise ships, and leading the Aonise into an ambush.
In a wild bid to thwart his visions of their annihilation Kendro orders them to retaliate. They jump into the enemy midst, fighting till the bitter end. Their losses are tremendous and the fleet crippled, resting outside the solar system of a planet called Earth.
Thank you for your time and consideration.
Have at it! :) I'm no softie when it comes to crits. Thanks so much.