CHECK POST #24 Updated Query 2017 version
Hello! So It's been a year since I took a break from my query. After editing my MS I finally changed up my query letter. It might not be the best, but I've been improving lately and would really appreciate the feedback (: THANKS AND HAPPY HOLIDAYS!!!
Senior year in high school was already a challenge for Arielle when the love of her life tried to rape her, but out of the unordinary a young unknown charming guy saved her life. He also helped her by sending her to a new state and giving her a new identity. Just when she finally had her life together with an amazing job, someone from her past interrupted it, putting her life in danger.
Now, the person whom she loathes the most, Jason Hampton who was a jock at her high school, is the only one who can save her from the people who want her dead. To make matters worse, not only must she learn the difference between shooting and reloading, but she must help Jason on his own taunting mission. The deeper Arielle dives into Jason’s mission which involves retrieving a secret code, she unwraps bits of secret about all the criminals around her.
While they both attempt to defeat enemies, regain Arielle’s old life back, and finish Jason’s mission, they awaken the deadliest and darkest human on earth; the Mafia leader. Although he is after Jason, he manages to kidnap Arielle and use her as bait. The Mafia Leader tells Arielle about his relationship with Jason, but he manages to leave an important piece out. Which builds awful questions, Arielle wants answers for.
Arielle now has to think of a plan in order to escape from someone who kills people for a living while trying to figure out the last bit of information.