Cat--thanx for the support.
CC--nothing. That line brings me to Armageddon, when Bruce Willis was talking about the teams at NASA. "They got people just sitting around thinkin' sh*# up." Well, I'm no rocket scientist, but I love thinkin' sh*# up.
Now, RC and EM. Yeah, I have a filing cabinet, and folder full of rejections. I knew I was onto something, though, and I certainly did my query research. I knew, early on, the only way to break the rules is to know them. It really wasn't until I followed AgentQuery for agents, and query format. They did, and still do, have the best format. What sparked my idea about putting a hook on the end was, the majority here seemed to focus on 'biting' the agent. I knew my opener was decent, and, even though the end of the hook was rather flat, I felt the beginning would raise an eyebrow. I can't tell you how many times I reread my piece to pull something out to make it more appealing, and the answer was staring me in the face the whole time. Because my target audience has a limited attention span. I 'hooked' the final sentence of every short chapter. I say short, because
of their attention span. I needed to keep them turning that page, and then I thought why not try it in the query? After all, the agent is the first reader. While the body never changed, the last line did. I felt the beginning hook would get them to the mini-syn, and felt if I hooked the ending I would receive, at least, some feedback. The responses were overwhelming.
I only posted my query here one time, when AQ Crew had a contest. So only those that followed that contest saw my query. I agree with Jean, when she says Cat and Alex have an awesome bite in the end also. I never really pieced that together until she pointed it out. She's one of the many reasons I keep coming back here.