Like most of you, I finished my first MS and didn’t know how to begin writing my Query. Thanks to the all mighty Google I stumbled upon this site. My first stop was to obviously check the successful queries. After reading a great deal of them, I felt confident enough to write my own. After all, it looked simple enough.
In my first draft, I made the mistake of trying to include too much. After a great amount of what I felt was constructive criticism, I came to realize that writing Queries was a completely different and new art form I had to try and master.
By my 3rd draft, I was getting better responses. Someone even made the comment that they felt it was spot on. Then a wave of more critiques came in right after the other, suggesting more changes and tweaks. I’ll admit, by this time I was getting frustrated and even began doubting myself.
By my 5th draft, my query seemed like it was written by someone else. I wasn’t happy with the direction it was heading and decided to take a break from it all.
During this break, I made the decision to trust my gut, and went back to one of my earlier drafts. I made some changes that I felt it needed, which included adding things that some suggested I remove. In the end it was my voice and my choice to say what I wanted how I wanted. I never posted it on this site, just said screw it, and sent them out. It took a long time, patience, and rejections, but I finally got the answer us writers are waiting to hear...
If it weren’t for this site I wouldn’t know where to start. The reason why I wanted to share this with you is because yes you are going to get a lot of great tips and feedback, and yes you’re not going to satisfy everyone. You might even get chewed up a bit. But when the smoke clears YOU are the one that’s going to have to believe in yourself and decide when YOU feel your query is ready.
I haven’t been active on this site for a really long time, but I do hope this helps some of you. And I sincerely want to wish you guys luck, because we writers really need to stick together.
Ask anyone still alive and they’ll tell you exactly where they were the day the sky turned purple and the world was lost.
The Zero Army began their global assault on May 1st and knew exactly how to strike to leave the planet crippled. The day went from bright and sunny to dark and bloody. Everything lost power, planes fell from the sky, people panicked, and cities went up in flames.
Christopher Denmark still has nightmares about that day. Out of the fifty-thousand men sent to battle this mysterious army he’s the only one who managed to make it back alive; barely breathing and comatose. The men from his platoon call him Rabbit, short for Rabbit’s foot. They say he's lucky and the young Marine is starting to believe them.
After waking up from a three month coma, Christopher learns that the sky has not returned to normal and now a massive, threatening purple cloud has appeared. Hovering like a freakish dust-storm and dividing the country, the people fear it and naturally stay away. Its menacing presence leads survivors to assume anyone stuck on the other side is dead.
However, a distress call comes from beyond the wall, sparking hope. Christopher is immediately assigned to the elite team: The Brass Knuckle Bullies, merely as a good luck charm. The team is reluctant to accept the newcomer and wants nothing to do with him. But together they travel into enemy territory as humanities last hope, and discover the Zero Army’s true intentions. They quickly learn that the sky turning purple was only the beginning of a much greater plan, and mankind is merely an obstacle in their way.
THE PURPLE CLOUD PROJECT is an adult sci-fi novel complete at 140,000 words
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