Hi everyone. I greatly appreciate all the feedback I've been getting. It really is helping a lot. Here's a new version drawing on some of the great comments I've gotten.
Dear Ms. Agent,
My parents shouldn’t have been having sex in the first place.
Instead: Amy, babysitter, age fifteen, climbed onto the sofa where she nuzzled Ray. She caressed his chest and lit butterfly kisses on his neck and lips. Ray, age twenty and already planning his escape, pulled her close. They kissed, giggled, and gasped as I was conceived in a mixture that was two parts love, one part statutory rape.
Complete at 94,000 words, TRANSFORMATION is my coming of age memoir about resilience, family, and transformation. It explores how embracing my Native American heritage as a child would ultimately cost me my family, change my ethnic identity, and put me at risk of imprisonment for following my faith.
My story recounts how my mother and I struggled to survive the exploits of my step-father, a man I loved dearly but who became a drug-abusing adulterer and stalker. As I grew into a man, I faced my fears and reconnected with my father only to uncover a guilty family secret that would change my life forever. An unflinching story of love, laughs, and magic in the midst of death and disaster, TRANSFORMATION is a lyrical meditation on change--and discovering how what makes us who we are is not what we think.
I am a writer, speaker, and commentator known for my work advancing civil rights and social justice. I have spoken at national conferences, have been an invited college speaker, and have appeared on many television and radio programs, including NBC, CBS, MSN.com, and other national and international media. My story has been featured on the front page of The Huffington Post multiple times and has formed the basis of many of my public appearances as well as dozens of articles I’ve published in The Advocate, Indian Country Today, and Diverse, among others. I have over 2,000 Twitter followers and I write for The Huffington Post.
With larger messages about topics like racism, religious freedom, families, and identity, my book is marketable to a wide audience. In my story I hope you will find the haunting candor of The Other Side and the moving triumph of The Glass Castle.
I would be pleased to send you my complete manuscript. Having read your online profiles, your interview with XYZ, and the glowing comments your authors have said about you, I think we could be a great match. Your expertise and taste for distinctive voices and strong character development will help my work find its place with audiences that love gripping literary memoirs. Thank you for your time and consideration.