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#1 CarlieNoel

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Posted 09 November 2015 - 11:05 AM

I re-drafted my query several times, and it took over a month to get it to this stage. I just signed with Claire Wilson at Rogers, Coleridge and White, and this is the version that she saw. (For anyone interested in stats, I sent this out to 32 agents all at once.) The book is actually going to be slightly different from this query, but still, I hope that this helps anyone beginning on their journey towards representation! Thank you to everyone in this lovely community who helped me along the way. 

 

Update on 1/19/16: I just accepted a two-book deal with a major publishing house!

 

Update 8/1/2016: The new title is IF BIRDS FLY BACK and will be available in Summer 2017 from HarperCollins in the US, Macmillan in the UK, Penguin Random House in Spain, etc. Here's the Goodreads, if you're interested: 

https://www.goodread...rom_search=true

 

This query does contain spoilers!

 

 

 

Dear Claire,

 

Sixteen-year-old Linny has spent all of high school as “camera girl,” filming her friends’ escapades while craving adventures of her own. So when Álvaro Herrera (star of Linny’s favorite film, the 1960’s cult classic Midnight in Miami) seemingly rises from the dead before her eyes, she believes it’s finally, finally her chance to break away from the sidelines. Three years ago, Álvaro vanished from a yacht in the Gulf of Mexico, and reporters and FBI agents alike are hell-bent on uncovering the secret of those missing years. Armed with a lifetime’s worth of pent-up wishes for excitement, Linny resolves to unravel the mystery first—no matter what it takes.

 

Enter seventeen-year-old Sebastian, an aspiring astrophysicist with melodramatic tendencies, whose mother just dropped the bomb that Álvaro is his father. Álvaro has no idea that he has a son, and because of his rapidly progressing Alzheimer’s, maybe never will. Now Sebastian has to get to know his dad before it’s too late, but (much to Sebastian’s chagrin) some girl keeps interrupting their father-son time…

 

Álvaro’s mystery soon leads Linny and Sebastian on an entangled obstacle course through suburban Miami. What they end up discovering—and what they keep from each other—might drive them apart forever.

 

WHY BIRDS FLY BACK is a 64,000-word literary young adult novel told in Linny and Sebastian’s alternating perspectives. It will perhaps appeal to readers of Rainbow Rowell and Sarah Dessen, and anyone who celebrates diverse books.

 

I have an MSt. in English from Oxford University and an MA in Creative Writing and Publishing from City University London, where I was mentored by Carnegie Medal nominee _______. I was recently a finalist for the Orlando Prize for Short Fiction, and I currently work as a Children’s Editorial Assistant at ______. We actually met when you came to the ______ office with the ultra-talented _______. Because your submissions are of the best that we receive (I absolutely adored _______), I hope you will consider representing me as well.

 

I have attached my synopsis and first fifty pages to this email. Thanks so much for your time.

 

Sincerely,



#2 LucidDreamer

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Posted 09 November 2015 - 12:20 PM

Congratulations!



#3 mwsinclair

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Posted 09 November 2015 - 03:17 PM

Yes, indeed, congratulations. It sounds like a wonderful work, too.



#4 RSMellette

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Posted 09 November 2015 - 06:03 PM

Congrats! You've really worked your way toward success.

 

And now the really nerve wracking part starts. :)


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#5 Litgal

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    In between I became a "hybrid" as part of a group of six authors involved in a high concept novel-in-six-parts called "A Day of Fire" which released in November of 2014. The book, "A Day of Fire," tells the story of the final days of the doomed city of Pompeii in a way you've never read it before.

Posted 09 November 2015 - 07:23 PM

Mazel Tov! Now that's the way it's done :)  Welcome to the "represented" side of the street!


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#6 annab3lla

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Posted 10 November 2015 - 11:08 AM

Congratulations! Sounds like a great book!



#7 RSMellette

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Posted 10 November 2015 - 12:37 PM

Carlie,

 

Check you messages.


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#8 Dogday

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Posted 12 November 2015 - 12:52 PM

Enjoy the moment.  Enjoy the ride.



#9 CCquinne

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Posted 17 November 2015 - 11:09 AM

Congrats!!!



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Posted 26 November 2015 - 12:18 PM

Congratulations!


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Posted 08 December 2015 - 03:46 PM

Beautifully written. I like that you included which type of audience may be interested in your work. Mentioning some authors who inspired your work helps paint a picture of your novel, and of who you are as a writer.... thank's for sharing your successful query. :)



#12 samcarnes07

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Posted 22 January 2016 - 02:29 PM

Congrates! :smile:



#13 MKDuffy

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Posted 28 January 2016 - 01:10 PM

Congratulations, and may you sell well! Keep us posted, love hearing success stories.  :smile:



#14 julialynn

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Posted 13 February 2016 - 09:04 PM

Wow, congrats!!


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Posted 17 February 2016 - 08:31 PM

Congrats, that's wonderful! Also, this sounds super interesting, and I can't wait to read it when it comes out! :)



#16 knparker

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Posted 07 March 2016 - 03:50 PM

Congrats. That seems like a very intriguing storyline. I'm curious to see the result. 



#17 graysonw

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Posted 07 April 2016 - 09:46 PM

Congrats. Love hearing stories like this :smile:



#18 CarlieNoel

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Posted 03 August 2016 - 01:25 PM

Thank you, all! The excitement still hasn't worn off yet! :)



#19 Jshal04

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Posted 03 August 2016 - 05:11 PM

CarlieNoel,

 

This is a lovely query and sounds like an interesting story. Congrats, and I look forward to reading it. :)


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Posted 12 August 2016 - 08:16 AM

Congrats! Your story sounds very interesting.







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