I think you have a bit of work to do on this query before sending it to agents. Don't worry, it tends to take multiple tries before any of us get this right. The art of the query requires different skills from those needed to write a great story. You may find it helpful to visit Queryshark to read up on how agents want queries to appear. Good luck and don't lose hope, this is a process that takes time.
Thank you. I made some changes and I looked up on writersdigest.com and it said a novella is 30.000-50,000 words and that a novel is 55,000-300,000 words. I double checked mine, it is over 53,000, so what do you think? Novella or Novel? Or don't even mention it at all?
When Allison Keller witnesses a robbery at the pharmacy, her home is broken into and this message is left on her bathroom mirror, KEEP YOUR MOUTH SHUT!
Ali makes a report at the scene, but didn't consider that she may have seen one of the suspects will put her in danger. The stalking begins, but after one of the robber's body is found with a bullet in his head, she thought it was over. Instead, the attacks increased and her job makes it more dangerous. She boards and trains dogs, the training takes place outside, where she is vulnerable to anyone who wants her dead.
Officer Ethan Lawson, who just had a cast taken off his arm, was also at the pharmacy. Then during one of his stakeouts he finds out Allison knows the suspect of a missing girls case he is working on. The two cases begins to fit together and the attacks on Ali makes Ethan suspect someone in the department is leaking information.
With Hanukkah quickly approaching, both may have to keep their holiday lights hidden away.
HANUKKAH HAVOC, a romance/suspense, is complete at 53,000 words. I have an associates degree in Creative Writing from Sinclair College in Dayton, Ohio. (<- I know some have crossed this out and in a thread about whether this is okay, I got one saying I shouldn't and another saying it wouldn't hurt, though an agent is more focused on my writing than my training. Then I contacted an editor friend who contacted an agent friend of hers and she agreed with it wouldn't hurt...So I am leaving it for now and will decide when I start submitting if I will keep it or not. Of course any input here will be considered)The first ten pages are pasted (or attached) below...(First Ch., synopsis, etc.)
Do you have a revised query I could look at? Otherwise I can critique the query in post #1.
Yes, sorry. For some reason I didn't get notified that anyone replied on this thread.