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#1 Petal65

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Posted 03 March 2016 - 07:04 PM

I worked on this query years go on this site (2011?) and revised both manuscript and queries A LOT. Last fall I sent out over 100 queries, got six requests for fulls (sci-fi is a hard genre) and two offers to rep.

 

Anyway, here's the news of my deal  for the book now called "Zero Repeat Forever": http://www.publisher...ary-8-2016.html

 

 

Dear Agent

 

I’m writing to tell you about my YA manuscript, Dandelion, about a cybernetic armored soldier who develops a dangerous obsession for a human girl. Readers (and audiences) of The Fifth Wave by Rick Yancey will enjoy the mystery and suspense of this page-turning alien invasion story, while readers who harken back to the fraught romance of The Hunger Games or Hush   Hush will also be entertained. I’m a big fan of your client ____________, and Dandelion shares some of the rather dark themes of her _____________, so I thought you might be interested.     

 

He has no voice, or name, only a rank, Eighth. He doesn't know the details of the mission, only his duties. Protect his Offside. Let her do the shooting. There is something familiar about the humans, something affecting about the way they scream and fall, but Eighth can't let that distract him. All he can do is follow his Offside and do what she tells him:  kick down doors, tear locks open. He lives to make her happy.         

 

Until a human kills her…

 

Sixteen year-old Raven has one summer as a camp counsellor to try to repair the damage she's done to her life, to prove that she’s not just another mixed-race kid who has gone off the rails, to give her boyfriend, Tucker a chance to live up to his promises. But all those good intentions are lost when the terrifying armored Nyx invade, destroying the cities, taking control of the planet. In their remote Alberta wilderness camp, Raven and her friends might be safe if they can just remain undetected, and find some way to survive the Canadian winter.         

 

But then a Nyx kills Tucker…         

 

Driven by vengeance and fear, Eighth and Raven cross paths in an unfamiliar world, a world forever changed by violent forces neither of them understands. They should hate each other. They should want each other dead. But their grief both draws them together and breaks them down, until all they have left is their shared goal – to get Raven and her friends out of the occupied zone, even though for Eighth, the journey means almost certain death.         

 

Part Terminator, part Beauty and the Beast, part apocalyptic Romeo & Juliet, Dandelion is 95,000 words. It’s self-contained, but with series potential involving interplanetary war, incorporeal alien overlords, rebellious clones and of course, lots of romantic angst.         

 

I’m the writer of the award winning and multi-nominated young adult novels in verse Audacious and Capricious.  My most recent novel for young readers, The Frail Days was published in April of 2015.  My next novel, a lower middle grade, is slated for publication in October 2016, with another YA hi/lo novel scheduled for spring 2017. Currently underway are two new YA novels, as well as some adult romances.  If you wish, you can find out a bit   more about me at www.angelhorn.com.         

 

Having found some success in the smaller independent publisher market, I’m moving into the next phase of my publishing journey and hoping to find representation with an agent who enjoys my work and can help me find the right home for it.         

 

Below, I’ve attached a sample of Dandelion as per your submission guidelines. Please let me know if you’d like anything more.         

 

I look forward to hearing from you and thank you for your time.


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#2 annab3lla

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Posted 03 March 2016 - 07:12 PM

Congrats on your deal! How exciting!



#3 Jemi

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Posted 03 March 2016 - 08:44 PM

That's fantastic!!! Congrats!!  :biggrin:  :biggrin:  :biggrin:



#4 Benjamminjones

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Posted 03 March 2016 - 10:29 PM

Congratulations! I can see why they went forward with your project. Solid query!



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Posted 03 March 2016 - 11:46 PM

That sounds amazing, can't wait to check it out in stores! Congrats!


I hope I've been helpful in some way. If you have the chance, I'm currently looking for all the help I can get on my first 250 of Elementalist. Thanks so much and may the words be with you!
 
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#6 cob816

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Posted 04 March 2016 - 04:16 PM

Congrats! That is a very impressive query letter.



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Posted 04 March 2016 - 07:19 PM

Bravo! Great agent and super deal!!! 


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Posted 06 March 2016 - 11:08 PM

wow this is great. Congrats


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#9 Andrea Roche

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Posted 09 March 2016 - 03:50 PM

A Hearty Congratulations to you!


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#10 MikeStrayer

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Posted 10 March 2016 - 07:14 PM

How did you compile such a huge list of agents to query? Digests? Databases? What was your strategy? 


Query, Literary Fiction: And Then You're Gone: http://agentquerycon...tion/?p=317848 

 

And Then You're Gone, Literary Fiction, Opening: http://agentquerycon...t-250/?p=314811


#11 Andrea Roche

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Posted 17 March 2016 - 01:54 PM

I saw a book named "Dandelion" win in the #Pitchmadness Mario Cart contest.  I wonder if it's the same one?


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#12 Niambi

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Posted 17 March 2016 - 03:17 PM

Congrats!

 

I am all about this query.  It's really nice.



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Posted 17 March 2016 - 04:24 PM

Congrats!



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Posted 21 March 2016 - 08:27 PM

I mainly used  http://www.publisher...ategory.cgi?c=5. I had to pay for a subscription but very worth it. I started with agents who specialized in YA and gave preference to those who had made six figure deals.

 

 

How did you compile such a huge list of agents to query? Digests? Databases? What was your strategy? 


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Posted 22 March 2016 - 01:04 PM

very nice! and congratulations.



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Posted 23 March 2016 - 04:43 AM

Fabulous query. Great deal. well done you. Your career as a writer is blooming!

I look forward to reading your book - that's right up my street.


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Posted 26 March 2016 - 02:58 PM

This query is so unprofessionally done that I find it very hard to believe that any agent actually read it in its entirety.



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Posted 26 March 2016 - 04:03 PM

This query is so unprofessionally done that I find it very hard to believe that any agent actually read it in its entirety.

 

Don't be a cunt, Joe. 


Query, Literary Fiction: And Then You're Gone: http://agentquerycon...tion/?p=317848 

 

And Then You're Gone, Literary Fiction, Opening: http://agentquerycon...t-250/?p=314811


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Posted 26 March 2016 - 04:46 PM

There's no need for that kind of language, Mike.


There's too much blood in my tea system. Time to put the kettle on.

 

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All projects except WINTER'S QUEEN are currently on hiatus until further notice. Thank you!

 

Queries:

Winter's Queen: http://agentquerycon...een-ya-fantasy/

Tenth Realm: http://agentquerycon...e-epic-fantasy/

Low Road: http://agentquerycon...orical-fantasy/

Moonhunter: http://agentquerycon...ya-xenofiction/

Song of the Sea: http://agentquerycon...sea-ya-fantasy/

My Soul to Keep: http://agentquerycon...porary-fantasy/

Dancing On Edges: http://agentquerycon...porary-fantasy/

Bellringer: http://agentquerycon...ringer-fantasy/

 

Hooks:

Winter's Queen: http://agentquerycon...tasy-hook-help/

Tenth Realm: http://agentquerycon...k-epic-fantasy/

Low Road: http://agentquerycon...fantasyvampire/

Moonhunter: http://agentquerycon...ya-xenofiction/

Song of the Sea: http://agentquerycon...ong-of-the-sea/

My Soul to Keep: http://agentquerycon...porary-fantasy/

Dancing on Edges: http://agentquerycon...asy-query-hook/

 

Synopses:

Winter's Queen: http://agentquerycon...een-ya-fantasy/

Tenth Realm: http://agentquerycon...ntasy-synopsis/

Low Road: http://agentquerycon...fantasyvampire/

My Soul to Keep: http://agentquerycon...porary-fantasy/


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Posted 26 March 2016 - 04:59 PM

Mike knows I'm right. Unless he's blind, or can't read.






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