I worked on this query years go on this site (2011?) and revised both manuscript and queries A LOT. Last fall I sent out over 100 queries, got six requests for fulls (sci-fi is a hard genre) and two offers to rep.
Anyway, here's the news of my deal for the book now called "Zero Repeat Forever": http://www.publisher...ary-8-2016.html
I’m writing to tell you about my YA manuscript, Dandelion, about a cybernetic armored soldier who develops a dangerous obsession for a human girl. Readers (and audiences) of The Fifth Wave by Rick Yancey will enjoy the mystery and suspense of this page-turning alien invasion story, while readers who harken back to the fraught romance of The Hunger Games or Hush Hush will also be entertained. I’m a big fan of your client ____________, and Dandelion shares some of the rather dark themes of her _____________, so I thought you might be interested.
He has no voice, or name, only a rank, Eighth. He doesn't know the details of the mission, only his duties. Protect his Offside. Let her do the shooting. There is something familiar about the humans, something affecting about the way they scream and fall, but Eighth can't let that distract him. All he can do is follow his Offside and do what she tells him: kick down doors, tear locks open. He lives to make her happy.
Until a human kills her…
Sixteen year-old Raven has one summer as a camp counsellor to try to repair the damage she's done to her life, to prove that she’s not just another mixed-race kid who has gone off the rails, to give her boyfriend, Tucker a chance to live up to his promises. But all those good intentions are lost when the terrifying armored Nyx invade, destroying the cities, taking control of the planet. In their remote Alberta wilderness camp, Raven and her friends might be safe if they can just remain undetected, and find some way to survive the Canadian winter.
But then a Nyx kills Tucker…
Driven by vengeance and fear, Eighth and Raven cross paths in an unfamiliar world, a world forever changed by violent forces neither of them understands. They should hate each other. They should want each other dead. But their grief both draws them together and breaks them down, until all they have left is their shared goal – to get Raven and her friends out of the occupied zone, even though for Eighth, the journey means almost certain death.
Part Terminator, part Beauty and the Beast, part apocalyptic Romeo & Juliet, Dandelion is 95,000 words. It’s self-contained, but with series potential involving interplanetary war, incorporeal alien overlords, rebellious clones and of course, lots of romantic angst.
I’m the writer of the award winning and multi-nominated young adult novels in verse Audacious and Capricious. My most recent novel for young readers, The Frail Days was published in April of 2015. My next novel, a lower middle grade, is slated for publication in October 2016, with another YA hi/lo novel scheduled for spring 2017. Currently underway are two new YA novels, as well as some adult romances. If you wish, you can find out a bit more about me at www.angelhorn.com.
Having found some success in the smaller independent publisher market, I’m moving into the next phase of my publishing journey and hoping to find representation with an agent who enjoys my work and can help me find the right home for it.
Below, I’ve attached a sample of Dandelion as per your submission guidelines. Please let me know if you’d like anything more.
I look forward to hearing from you and thank you for your time.