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Daniel Venture is a fourteen-year-old loner with a rare blister condition ruining his life. After refusing an eerie doctor’s offer to be treated in an unfamiliar clinic specializing in his condition, Daniel finds out that his mother has been kidnapped. He suspects the doctor, who confirms his surmise, but now charges a steep price for him to see his mother: she wants his eyes. Daniel agrees.
After undergoing an eye procedure that provides him robotic red eyes, Daniel wakes up in a mysterious parallel universe haunted by demons. There, on his way to becoming a Detraz warrior – his only way to defeat the demoness who kidnapped his Mom – he studies parapsychology and gains friends on his journey to find and bring back home his mother.
Combining elements of mystery, RED EYED DANIEL is a YA sci-fi, complete at 100,000 words. It is a stand alone with series potential.
Thank you for your time and consideration.
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Any critique will be very much appreciated!