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This is a book blurb, not a query, so really want to just intrigue someone enough to grab the sample chapters rather than providing the details as you might find in a pitch.
All feedback appreciated...
He waited ten years to take his revenge. They had waited eons.
When the ancients colonized the planet Serenity, they created a divide. The settlers made their homes inside a wall. Everything and everyone else was left outside.
Many lifetimes have passed. The colonists still rely on the technology they no longer hold the skills to repair.
An earthquake has destroyed the power to maintain their protective wall. To repair it, the last remaining expert will need to journey beyond the wall, into a land engulfed by war.
Is the failing of the wall a natural disaster, a ruse, or part of an elaborate native sympathiser plot?
Welcome to Serenity, where life is anything but.