Another version. Pretty much the same thing, but I combined some elements with an older version. Hope it's closer, wanna get this book out. Thanks again to all advice and help.
NYPD Detective Eric Spellman has a reputation for his keen instinct: he’s never on the wrong side of an investigation—until 1991.
Eric delves into the disappearance of two men. When the grieving wives receive letters from their husbands saying they left for other women, Eric questions whether the men are alive or dead. As his rigorous, obsessive investigation turns up nothing, his bosses shut down the case due to a lack of evidence. At his wits end, Eric is unwillingly forced to retire, leaving the case cold.
Ten years later, Eric’s cousin on the force is critically wounded hot on the trail of another missing young man. Eric comes out of retirement to lend a hand with a chance to solve the riddle, but this time he has a head start. His cousin found the grisly remains of the three missing men, along with a link to all of them: a mistress, Kaitlin Donovan. I agree with the above statement that you should cut this name out. I think the query can work just fine without it
Determined to finish what he started, Eric grills Kaitlin about the affairs. Instead, he learns she has a famous friend—a renowned author who wrote a short story with chilling similarities to
Eric’s and his cousin’sthis case. Convinced of his guilt,Eric is driven on taking down the author, but makes a disturbing discovery that exonerates him, and turns his attention back to Kaitlin. Questioning why everyone around Kaitlin ends up dead, Eric ’sis hellbent on putting an end to the mystery that has eluded him for years before someone else is trapped in the killer’s deadly web. I was trying to make some suggestions of how to cut this paragraph down, but I'm finding it quite hard without knowing what is absolutely the most important information that should be included. I really do think you'll be good to go if you cut down the wordiness of these sentences though
Thank you for your advice, really appreciate it. Will go back and make corrections. Was told the name of the mistress wasn't a good idea. Don't know why I put it back in LOL. Maybe a brain fart. Thanks again.