Updated draft in #9 below!
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Seventeen-year-old Seersha has always known her place. She is a handmaiden, loyally serving the Vishna who rule the city-state of Tamsara. These powerful women have the ability to perform the Vedra, a series of movements and poses that allow them to channel great power. Only a perfect body can perform the Vedra; high-caste girls like the petite Seersha who do not meet this ideal may still bring honor to their families by serving as handmaidens.
When Tamsara is invaded by the barbaric Khandun, most of the Vishna are slaughtered or captured, and the rest flee. Only Seersha and five companions remain behind, determined to take back the city and free the captive Vishna who have been brutally maimed by the Khandun to keep their power in check. As a lowly handmaiden, Seersha feels useless—until she begins to learn to overcome the limitations of her body and use the Vedra herself.
Seersha realizes that if such a thing is possible, then she can teach the crippled Vishna captives to reclaim their power and rise up against the Khandun. But there is more to the Vedra than just the physical body, and the captive Vishna are broken in mind and spirit. Seersha must lead them to overcome their doubts and impairments so that they can perform the Vedra once again—but first she must conquer her own. The very survival of the Vishna, and of Tamsara, is at stake.
TAMSARA is a young adult fantasy novel set in a world inspired by the culture of India. It is complete at 72,000 words.