I'm baaaaack, she said in a creepy voice.
Wrote a new one from scratch. Also tweaked an old one. Which do you prefer?
School legends say the ghost takes the living for its own. Not that seventeen-year-old Sara cares about ghosts. That's more of the purview of her best friend Ali. In fact, if Sara can get through high school with good grades and without attracting the attention of her archnemesis Cecily Roberts, life would be grand.
Of course, that would be asking too much.
When strange things start happening around her—Ali complaining of threatening whispers only she can hear, Cecily in possession of a wrong-feeling book only Sara ever sees her with, hints of a redheaded girl that isn't really there—Sara questions her sanity. But then Ali disappears, leaving behind only disturbing messages in their shared locker. Ones that continue to come even after she's gone.
Forced to give the ghost stories some credit and desperate to help her friend, Sara is forced to turn to the only person who seems to know what's going on—Cecily Roberts. Cecily spins a tale of shadow worlds and spell books, but despite the absurdity of it all, it's the only lead Sara's got. If true, this ghost has been taking people for a long time, and it doesn't give them back.
But Sara's going to bring Ali home, and no ghost is going to stop her.
WHAT LURKS BENEATH THE BLEACHERS is an 89,000 word YA paranormal novel which focuses on friendship, forgiveness, and why it's bad to pick up creepy books. It’s told in alternating viewpoints between Sara and Ali. Thank you for your time and consideration.
School legends say the ghost takes the living for its own.
-year-old Sara has too much to worry about—her parents' expectations, her inability to hold a conversation with her crush, and avoiding her archnemesis, Cecily Roberts—to put any stock in her best friend Ali's ghost stories. But when Ali vanishes, Sara discovers those stories may be all too real. Especially since she continues to receive disturbing letters from Ali in their shared locker.
Desperate to save her friend from the reality those letters depict, Sara is forced to turn to the only person who seems to have any idea what's going on—Cecily Roberts. The story Cecily spins goes against everything Sara knows about how the world works, but Ali's always been there for her, and she'll do anything to get her back.
But if she doesn't hurry, there will be nothing left of Ali to save—and then the ghost will be free to strike again.
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