Hi everyone! I'm preparing for PitchMadness (yikes!), and I'm a little stuck...
I've entered PitchSlam and PitchMAS before with this pitch:
Harper's birthmark is meant to show her soulmate. But when it leads to the troll stalking her in YouTube, it's getting removed.
But after talking a lot with betas, I've decided to re-write the manuscript completely and include aliens on it. So this pitch might not be the best one to use, because even though what I say there still happens on the book, it might not be a good surprise to agents to find later that I included aliens (they appear, like, at the first 100 words).
So I went and wrote this:
Thirteen-year-old Harper must team with her online bully to free a group of aliens enslaved by humans for two centuries.
But I'm still not sure, and then I combined the two pitches and got this:
Harper's birthmark is meant to show her soulmate. But when it leads to her online bully, she learns he needs her help to free an ancient race of aliens from humans.
But as everyone can see, I'm pretty confused. What should I use?