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#1 dmsimone

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Posted 21 February 2017 - 12:42 PM

Please help me pick one? Or maybe, a combination of different elements will create something new?  Any favorites?

 

 

With resolve forged like the steel of her favorite dagger, a Viking girl commandeers a longship, steals an enchanted banner, and sails into the Scottish Hebrides to rescue her brother from a vengeful Norse sorceress. 35 words

 

In ninth century Britain, a Viking girl vows to save her brother from a vengeful Norse sorceress. She steals a longship and sails into the Scottish Hebrides, unearthing secrets and clues to find her brother. 35 words

 

Pippa, a gutsy Viking girl, vows to save her brother from a vengeful Norse sorceress. She sails into the Scottish Hebrides on a stolen longship and relies on ancient blood magic to find him. 34 words

 

Pippa, a Viking girl searching for her brother, must overcome the dark magic of a vengeful Norse sorceress. Pippa steals a longship and sails into the Scottish Hebrides, relying on ancient magic to find him. 35 words



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Posted 21 February 2017 - 11:29 PM

In ninth century Britain, Pippa, a Viking girl, teams up with a young sorceress/blood-magician/(I’m trying to avoid using ‘sorceress’ twice). Together they steal a longship and sail into the Scottish Hebrides to save Pippa’s kidnapped brother from a vengeful Norse sorceress.



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Posted 22 February 2017 - 12:18 AM

Please help me pick one? Or maybe, a combination of different elements will create something new?  Any favorites?

 

 

With resolve forged like the steel of her favorite dagger, a Viking girl commandeers a longship, steals an enchanted banner, and sails into the Scottish Hebrides to rescue her brother from a vengeful Norse sorceress. 35 words

 

In ninth century Britain, a Viking girl vows to save her brother from a vengeful Norse sorceress. She steals a longship and sails into the Scottish Hebrides, unearthing secrets and clues to find her brother. 35 words

 

Pippa, a gutsy Viking girl, vows to save her brother from a vengeful Norse sorceress. She sails into the Scottish Hebrides on a stolen longship and relies on ancient blood magic to find him. 34 words

 

Pippa, a Viking girl searching for her brother, must overcome the dark magic of a vengeful Norse sorceress. Pippa steals a longship and sails into the Scottish Hebrides, relying on ancient magic to find him. 35 words

 

Pippa, an orphaned Viking girl, steals a longship and sails to the Scottish Hebrides to rescue her brother from a vengeful Norse sorceress, only to realize she's the sorceress's next target. (31 words)

 

I think I remember from your query or synopsis or something I read, that her father was snatched away a long time ago and her brother is her only remaining family. Right? If not, strike "orphaned" and replace with another adjective of your choice. :D


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Posted 23 February 2017 - 01:09 PM

Thank you folks for the tips!



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Posted 23 February 2017 - 05:29 PM

Pippa, an orphaned Viking girl, steals a longship and sails to the Scottish Hebrides to rescue her brother from a vengeful Norse sorceress, only to realize she's the sorceress's next target. (31 words)

 

 

I like SRPasternack's suggestion!






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