(Mostly) complete at 87,000 words, The Last Roskildes is an adult low fantasy with a slow-burn enemies-to-lovers element, written in first person and set amid the fictional world of the medieval Vazran Empire. Although it's an alternative world, there's no magical element as dragons/magic/elves etc don’t feature. To a borrow a phrase, "history with a quarter turn to the fantastic."
When the murder of an empress drags their bookish ex-diplomat father back into politics, Virginia An Roskilde, a naïve but stubborn young noble, finds her small world cracked open. Isolated at home, the younger sister in Neri’s shadow, Gin has never felt like she belongs. But when Neri’s letters from the imperial Court cease, Gin is catapulted into a new world of decadence and power games.
Four years later, with their childhood home in ruins and their family dead, Gin and Neri flee across the empire from Emperor Ramos. Disorientated and grieving, they attempt to put as much distance between their old life and themselves as possible, whilst waiting for Ramos’s interest in their capture to fade. But freedom means Gin must face Vasco, the commander of the armsmen ordered to hunt them. A man that nobility hate, who might have killed her father, and from whom she and her sister have run for two long years.
As civil war brews, a defiant Gin must risk everything to carve a place amid rebellion and divided loyalties. Or lose her sister to an Emperor who has torn everything from them.
Ideally, I’m looking for weekly or bi-weekly feedback, plus someone who's willing to CP a whole MS, not just the first few chapters. Feedback on structure and how effectively I'm signalling plot clues would be particularly appreciated! The majority of the MS has been written, and I will be using the feedback to work on the second half which is more bitty and in need of tightening up.
As a CP and beta reader, I’ve been part of a number of critique groups, and especially enjoy historical pre 1900, romance (preferably historical), fantasy, and some sci-fi. I don't do horror. Regarding feedback, I tend to focus on world building, plot holes and character psychology, although will jump in here and there with line edits, if I think something might be useful. If you’re interested, and think we would match, please email me at kailamurray[at]kailamurray[dot]com with a bit about yourself.