(Mostly) complete at 80,000 words, Cry of a Hawk is an adult low fantasy with a slow-burn enemies-to-lovers romance element, written in first person and set amid the fictional world of the medieval Vazran Empire. Although it's an alternative world, the MS aims to read like historical fiction as dragons/magic/elves etc don’t feature. To a borrow a phrase, "history with a quarter turn to the fantastic."
When the murder of an Empress drags their bookish ex-diplomat father back into politics, Virginia An Roskilde, a naïve but stubborn young noble, and her older sister, Neri, are forced to flee after Neri attracts the obsessive attention of Emperor Ramos.
Isolated at home, the younger sister in Neri’s shadow, Gin has never felt like she belongs. But when Neri’s letters from the imperial Court cease, Gin is catapulted into a world of decadence and power games. Four years later, with their home burning behind them, Gin and her sister find themselves fleeing the whim of a mad Emperor into the night. Hunted from town to village, they run, desperate to escape the soldiers he sends after them.
As rebellion brews, Gin must risk everything to carve a place amid civil war, divided loyalties, and the reach of Vasco, the man commanded to run them to ground. Or face losing her sister to an Emperor who has torn everything from them.
Ideally, I’m looking for weekly or bi-weekly feedback. The majority of the book has been written, minus some linking passages that I’m stuck on. So, feedback on this area and structure would be particularly appreciated!
As a CP and beta reader, I’ve been part of a number of critique groups, and especially enjoy historical pre 1900, romance (preferably historical), fantasy, and some sci-fi. I tend to focus on world building, plot holes and character psychology, although will jump in here and there with line edits, if I think something might be useful. If you’re interested, and think we would match, please email me at kailamurray[at]kailamurray[dot]com with a bit about yourself.