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#1 RecoveryMac

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Posted 05 March 2017 - 12:01 AM

Caterina LaFica is an average teenager who is introduced to drinking alcohol at her mother's social soirees and at local teenage parties. As a means to cope with problems in her life, most notably her parents' divorce, Caterina starts to drink regularly and tries to keep her addiction a secret, even from her boyfriend Frankie. Eventually, Caterina's increasingly severe drinking almost leads to tragedy, and she enters Alcoholics Anonymous, beginning an ongoing struggle to get sober and stay that way.

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Posted 06 March 2017 - 06:46 PM

This is really short for a synopsis; you've got a lot more space to work with. A synopsis can be 500-1000 words long. First thing I suggest is explaining more and giving more of the story. 

 

Caterina LaFica is an average teenager who is this phrase is so overused in YA fiction introduced to drinking alcohol this feels clinical to me, what kind of drink did she try first? My first taste of alcohol was a cheap beer - nasty at her mother's social soirees and at local teenage parties super vague. As a means to cope with problems in her life, most notably her parents' divorce, This is also super vague - what problems? I have problems, too, but I didn't start drinking Caterina starts to drink regularly and tries to keep her addiction a secret, even from her boyfriend Frankie. Eventually, Caterina's increasingly severe drinking almost leads to tragedy, such as? and she enters Alcoholics Anonymous, beginning an ongoing struggle to get sober and stay that way.

 

There's a lot of vaugeness going on here. A synopsis isn't a query, it's a short "this is what happens." Why did she start drinking in the first place? What was it about the divorce that pushed her to drink? Where does she get her alcohol? If she's taking it, doesn't the owner know it's missing? If she's drinking regularly, hoe does no one notice? If she's an average teen, then she's going to school, right? As someone who works in a school - teachers notice when students come drunk or hungover. And, what happens that makes her join AA? 

 

It sounds interesting, but right now it's so vague that nothing in the story stands out to me and says "read me!" Keep at it! 



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Posted 06 March 2017 - 07:36 PM

Caterina LaFica is a 15-year-old girl dealing with feelings of isolation and inadequacy. Her parents are divorced, for which she blames herself, and she has minimal contact with her alcoholic father. Caterina lives with her mother, Gina, and stepfather, Angelo Cullatone. They do not notice how lonely Caterina is. She feels overshadowed by her sister, Polly Esther LaFica-Cafone, and wishes to live with her biological father.
Caterina commences drinking alcohol at a party hosted by her mother and stepfather. She feels uncomfortable with standard questions the guests ask her about how she is doing at school and what her favorite subjects are and is overcome with anxiety when she is forced to engage in conversations with her parents friends at the party. She also feels out of place in several other situations. For example, her desire to fit in at school manifests itself with her attempting to become a member of the chorus. Unfortunately, she is not accepted.
Caterina makes numerous attempts to have contact with her salesman father, Neil, who often ignores his daughter's sincere attempts to have a meaningful father-daughter relationship with him. When Neil makes the effort to see Caterina, he presents himself as someone who is interested in her life and wants to please her. They often have fun together. When they meet, Caterina is disappointed to discover that her father is unemployed. He responds by asking her to get him a beer. Her mood, however, improves when her father tells her that he threw his sample case from a bridge; this is a source of amusement for her. She is even more pleased when Neil gives her money in order to purchase an outfit for a party.
At first, when Caterina drinks, the alcohol seems to suppress her feelings of anxiety, insignificance and inadequacy. She associates happiness with drinking. For example, Caterina is embarrassed and humiliated when her mother arranges for her to attend a party at the home of Angelo's boss with big man on campus, Frankie Manlighet. When Caterina emphatically states that she does not want to go, her mother's primary concern is of the social repercussions if Caterina does not attend the party. Thus, at the party, Caterina plies herself with alcohol in order to satiate her feelings of inferiority. She surprises herself and others when she sings, which everyone at the party appreciates. When she becomes inebriated at the party, her parents attribute blame to Frankie, even though it was Caterina who made the conscious decision to drink copious amounts of alcoholic beverages. Gina is more concerned with the impression that the guests formed at the party of Caterina as opposed to caring about the welfare of her daughter.
Frankie exhibits an interest in Sarah. He invites her to spend a day riding on his rebuilt Vespa 350CC motorcycle. As a result of Caterina's close relationship with Frankie, she becomes more popular at school. While life at school improves for Caterina, her home life continues to be complicated, confusing and erratic. For example, her mother decides to fire Marissa, the housekeeper, whom she has accused of watering down the gin. Sarah knows that she herself is to blame and attempts to stand up for Marissa. By this point in time, Caterina has begun to appropriate the alcohol which is delivered to the house.
Although Caterina exhibits symptoms of shame as a result of her drinking, she begins to consume alcohol at school. Matters become even more complex for her when the school counsellor speaks to Gina and Caterina about the fact that Caterina has not attended classes. Gina also realises that Caterina has forged notes in Gina's name excusing her daughter from her classes. The counsellor is adamant that something is wrong in Caterina's life. Gina takes offence to this statement. The counsellor characterises Caterina as a student with a high I.Q. who once took a diligent approach to her schoolwork. Gina resents the counsellor's interventions and feels that she is being targeted because Caterina's parents are divorced.
When Frankie confronts Caterina about her binge drinking, she confesses that she drinks because the alcohol makes life a little bit easier. Frankie gently rebuffs her when she tells him that she loves him. To make matters worse, Caterina is unable to make contact with her father when she attempts to do so by telephone. She drinks when she is supposed to be babysitting and then passes out. When her mother discovers what Caterina has been up to, her only concern is that she will be the focus of neighbourhood gossip. In a confrontation with Angelo and Gina, Caterina states that she has been drinking almost everyday for two years.
As she drinks more, however, things begin to get out of control. When Caterina and her mother see a doctor, her mother proves her inadequacy as a parent because she refuses to believe that Caterina has a problem and is only concerned what other people will think. Despite her mother's criticism, Caterina attends an Alcoholics Anonymous meeting where she meets Symion, who is even younger than she. What Symion tells the group resonates with Caterina. She recognises herself in what Symion says, such as the lying to other people as well as to oneself.
During her family therapy sessions, Caterina expresses a desire for her family to be complete once again and for her parents to stop fighting. When Neil reveals that he is unable to have full custody of Caterina because of the nature of his job, she once again feels the irresistible urge to drink. She is unable to purchase liquor because of her young age. She then asks a group of rough-looking teenagers to purchase a fifth of vodka for her. Caterina attempts to seal the bargain by inviting the youths to do anything that they would like to her. They oblige, but tease her by devouring most of the bottle themselves. After she devours The rest of the vodka, she decides to take Frankie's bike for a spin. Driving too fast she loses control, totaling the bike and landing in the hospital.
Caterina spends time in a hospital, where she expresses extreme remorse for the way she has acted. She does not understand why she has been placed in a world where the only feelings she possesses are dismal. Caterina realizes how much she is loved when not only her father is willing to help her, but also her friends whom she met when she attended the Alcoholics Anonymous meeting. She admits repeatedly that she's an alcoholic much to Angelo and Gina's embarrassed dismay.




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