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#1 onArete

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Posted 12 March 2017 - 09:39 PM

-Love from Dagen the Brave

-The Many Unfulfilled

-Dagen the Brave and Cowardly

-These Fractured Lives

-The City of Water



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Posted 13 March 2017 - 03:05 AM

Fractured Lives  - cut the these.  More memorable



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Posted 14 March 2017 - 08:14 AM

They strike me as different genres. What is the story about?



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Posted 29 March 2017 - 06:18 PM

This story is a fantasy YA novella set in a fictional universe.  It tells the story of Dagen (the Brave) who lives in a town where the weather is based on the citizen's mood.  She soon discovers that harsher weather- i.e. earthquakes, etc.- are linked to her mood alone.  When a twist series of events forces her to flee, she is found by an agency from the Cities, which lie just over the hills, to train with a few other teens who have similar mood-based powers.  Things happen, et cetera, et cetera, until she is forced to choose to join and help the villian or have her friends killed in her name.  She joins him- until things get so bad because of her actions that she kills the villain, allowing her friends to die in the process.

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Posted 06 April 2017 - 11:55 PM

This is just personal taste:

 

"City of Water" is good but makes me think of "City of Bones" immediately. And that's a huge franchise.

 

What about "The Unfulfilled?"


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Posted 27 April 2017 - 08:36 PM

Dagen the Brave and Cowardly
The duality jumps at you

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Posted 01 May 2017 - 01:32 AM

They all seem like they fit the same novel depending on the genre and mood.

"Dagen The Brave and Cowardly" works perfectly if it's a humorous novel.

"The Unfilfilled" works for a love story, and "City of Water" would work for a dystopian novel.

p.s. I agree about staying away from similar titles when it comes to franchises, but go with what you think works, and an agent/editor can give you a hard answer on whether you should change your title. There are tons of books out there with similar titles.

Although, a great title fits with the plot of your story. Star Wars and Star Trek would be interchangeable if it weren't for the plots of both franchises.

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Posted 18 May 2017 - 01:58 AM

I agree re: 'City of Water', it makes me think of Cassandra Clare's 'City of Bones'.

 

As for 'These Fractured Lives', I think of Amy Kaufman & Meagan Spooner's 'These Broken Stars/Their Fractured Light' books.

 

I like 'The Many Unfulfilled', but it doesn't jump out at me immediately. It's one of those titles I like the more I think about it!


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Posted 02 June 2017 - 03:11 PM

How about something like "Fractured Moods" since her emotions can cause earthquakes?



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Posted 22 November 2017 - 10:32 AM

I work with teens (16-17 years old) as an English teacher, so I used my captive audience and here is what they said:

 

-Love from Dagen the Brave (confusing and they said definitely wouldn't pick up in a store. The boys were adamant that it shouldn't say love)

-The Many Unfulfilled (Sounds like most titles out there now, they said. Might get lost in the sea of titles similar to this)

-Dagen the Brave and Cowardly (sounds like it's for little kids and they would assume it was for 10-12 year olds)

-These Fractured Lives (sounds like "one of those dramatic shows" (they meant a soap opera)

-The City of Water (is it related to the City of Ashes and the City of Glass by Clare?)

 

I don't know if this is helpful at all, but there's 28 opinions boiled down into the most popular responses.



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Posted 22 November 2017 - 01:04 PM

Hello Missbee,

 

I'm not great at coming up with titles. I don't think any of those titles do your story justice.

When you come up with the right title, you will know.

 

However, I have gotten better at creating titles and this website has helped - https://www.wikihow....ood-Story-Title

 

Hope that helps,

 

Can you check out my query at

 

http://agentquerycon...-book/?p=349163


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