I'd be thankful for any comment .
Here's my newest version: http://agentquerycon...tique/?p=336526
I understood my MS is too long, and decided to split it to two. Hence, I changed both the query and the title.
Dear ____ ____ ,
Due to your interest in social issues and in historical fiction, I believe you might enjoy this true story:
Bernice leads her people against Rome ready to face death, not love. Opposing the enemy officer she craves turns to be tougher than opposing an empire.
When Bernice's father tries to kill himself, pressed by inflating debt to the senators controlling Rome, Bernice vows to overthrow the senators' abusive oligarchy. She and her father help the rebellious Caligula become emperor, while seeking a way out of their debt. Bernice gets the needed aid from her childhood friend Alexander, now a formidable officer in the Roman army, and they keep seeing each other to discuss their mutual dream of justice.
By the time the new Emperor Caligula appoints Bernice's father as King of Israel, Princess Bernice and Alexander are hopelessly in love. Caligula - mistakenly believing an emperor is able to oppose the oligarchs - revives the republic's elections, and is poisoned to insanity. The oligarchs funnel the money of the empire's people to their own pockets, leaving the masses starved and enslaved, but how else can they pay for their wine-baths and oppressive army?
When the oligarchs murder Caligula, Bernice and her father start spearheading a rebellion of the entire eastern empire. After the announcement of independence, Bernice's father is assassinated. Alexander hurries to the grieving Queen Bernice, and she finds consolation in his loving arms. Fearing for the life of his love, Alexander proposes marriage to her, knowing she can't marry a Roman commander without ending the rebellion.
Bernice has to choose between her people's fight for liberty and her safe 'happily ever after'.
THE WRONG EMPRESS is a 75,000 word work of historical fiction, the first of a duo. It combines the dramatic historical events of Robert Harris's Pompeii with the innovative cultural perception of Dan Brown's The Da Vinci Code, displaying the contradicting Christian-Jewish and Roman-Greek worldviews, a clash which is still tearing our society apart.
The story is based on my B.A. in history of the classical age, on my work as a tour guide in Roman period's luxurious quarters, on several years of intensive research, and on my M.A. in Arts from Lesley University. My blog's posts received thousands of visits, each.
The completed manuscripts of the duo are available upon request.