Draft number six down in reply #19. Thanks again for all the feedback. This is so drastically different than what I started with, and I really appreciate the constructive criticism.
Found here: http://agentquerycon...st-19/?p=336739
Also, if you're willing to take a peek at the query for my other work, Worthless, a YA/NA Fantasy-Thriller, please do! You can find it here: http://agentquerycon...iller/?p=336503 (Eh, this may be outdated. Newest version may be a post or two below this).
Completely new query is down in reply 6. Thanks for the input that led to the changes, and hopefully it's something a little more on-point to what people were thinking.
As soon as I figure out how to link it...I will!
Hello, I just joined the forum, but I've got a query I could use a hand with. I've been reading through some to get a feel for it, and I plan on offering feedback in the near future. Please see below, and thanks in advance for any feedback you can offer.
With Borrowed Time, people are no longer limited to 24 hours in a day, and Detective Alex Stokes is going to need all the time he can get if he hopes to stop a plan that's already been set into motion to cripple the world's economy.
Alex Stokes is a detective with the Toronto TimeCrime division, an officer who investigates crimes involving the use of Borrowed Time. An officer with a secret. When a bomb in Tokyo brings Japanese police officer Misaki Aiko to his captain’s office, this loner finds himself taking on a partner for the first time in years. Misaki’s prime suspect? A man who was the closest thing Alex ever had to a father.
ChronoTek, the mega-corporation responsible for literally buying and selling the hours of people’s lives, seems central to discovering the truth, but Alex may need to decide between solving the case and proving his friend’s innocence. And he’ll have to do it while keeping his overly-perceptive new partner away from one very important question: Who is Alex Stokes, really?
BORROWED TIME is complete at just under 130,000 words, and if you enjoyed 'Inception', you'll enjoy this.