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#1 SRPasternack

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Posted 18 March 2017 - 01:35 AM

A young vaquero tries to prove himself to his caballero grandfather by driving his herd to Arizona in record time, only to be waylaid by a chance at real love. Shakespearean comedy meets Wild West.

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Posted 20 March 2017 - 06:12 AM

A young vaquero tries to prove himself to his caballero grandfather by driving his herd to Arizona in record time, only to be waylaid by a chance at real love. Shakespearean comedy meets Wild West.

 

Everything I crossed out was a bit too vague for a hook so there was no real sense of obstacles. Shakespearean comedy meets Wild West should be removed as well. There aren't really a place for comments on your writing in a hook or pitch. 






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