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#1 Calico041

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Posted 20 April 2017 - 07:12 PM

For five spunky cousins what begins as a typical summer day on their grandmother’s farm quickly becomes the adventure of a lifetime when they tumble through an old wishing well and land in a world populated by quirky characters, breathtaking scenery, and unimaginable evil.

 


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Posted 20 April 2017 - 07:43 PM

For five spunky cousins, what begins as a typical summer day on their grandmother’s farm, quickly becomes the adventure of a lifetime when they tumble through an old wishing well. (Make the left over, part of your second sentence) and land Landing in a world populated by quirky characters, breathtaking scenery, and unimaginable evil, add something else.

Just an idea, of course! 



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Posted 20 April 2017 - 08:51 PM

five spunky cousins tumble through an old wishing well and must ___________________ fill in the blank with their objective.


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Posted 01 May 2017 - 01:20 AM

It's a nice attempt. Remember, however, no matter what the reader needs to know:

1.) About the MC
2.) What the MC wants
3.) What is preventing the MC from getting what she/he wants
4.) What the MC must do to overcome.




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