Hello everyone, I'm thankful to be able to speak on a forum to a group of immensely talented authors and literary insiders about fiction and queries.
Today I have a small favor to ask, if at all possible. I've sent this query of mine out to a few different agents (five, to be exact) and they've all come back with a rejection. And while this may sound petulant or whiny because five is no great number in the pantheon of rejection notices, I'd like to submit my query in its most base form as to possibly be able to improve it with the power of community.
And so if you decide to read it and also read any of this and also respond, then I must thank you profusely.
Now personalizations are done w/r/t the queries, but those are generally light, the real meat-and-potatoes of the query is provided infra.
Thank you for all criticisms, and if the writing is flat-out bad then please inform me of that too.
Today I would like to present my 102,000-word Novel And Nature Must Obey for your consideration today,
Charles Boñeyt is a man with no sense of self. He is not devoid of emotion, but when it comes to deep intrinsic beliefs and actualizations, Charles is unable to feel either. And so, as he experiences this crisis of self, whereas he feels like he’s missing something he doesn’t know ever had in the first place, he decides to move to Deleuze, a city on the crossroads between Wyoming, Nebraska, and Colorado. There he is confronted with a synecdoche of himself in the city of Deleuze, and it makes him realize what he has become. So he must decide if he can fix himself to be alive in a hypertensive-hypertrophic world where he matters very little either way.
Then we have Charles Boñeyt Jr, who faces his own dysphoria of self four years after the death of his father. As Charles Jr. follows in the footsteps of his father he is conflicted with what he wants to be, what he knows he is, and his own rapidly deteriorating health at the behest of a disease that no one seems to know about. And in this conflict he finds himself forsaking the people and passions most close to him--whether or not due to the disease or due to his own fading sanity is unknown.
Interspersed along with these two main story lines we see the tales of drug addicts, people afflicted with Bipolar Disorder, A student who needs to explain a call from the school, a system of colostomy bags and catheters to keep people operating at top efficiency, and a group of anal-retentive accountants on the brink of committing terrorism. All stories take place against the backdrop of the ever-imposing Deleuze, which is impassive to it all.
Inspired by Pynchon, Delillo, and Wallace, And Nature Must Obey is my cross between Black-Comedy Satire and Speculative Fiction which proposes thoughts on inefficient bureaucracy, alienation, motivation, depression, and the pursuit of happiness in America.
Thank you very much for your time, I have included the first fifteen pages of the novel for your consideration. Upon request I can also provide a detailed synopsis and full manuscript.
from a school, not from the school, that is a slight affectation. Sorry.