New to this forum. Been swimming in the QL critique forum mostly. With their help, my QL is in pretty decent shape I think. But I have two BIG questions. One has to do with the QL and also applies to finding the right agent. The other has to do with rule breaking.
#1 I have never read anything like what I am writing. I don't mean that as a brag. I mean, I'm sort of lost. Maybe its kind of like Brian McClellan's powder mage stuff. It's not steampunk... but it sort of is. Takes place in an alternative world in what looks a lot like our 17th-18th centuries. But the tech is based on magnetics (so no metal) and glass instead of steam and/or combustion. It's got kind of a highwayman/pioneer/cowboy feel to it. But the MC is a warrior monk. So it harkens to David Caradine's Kung Fu from back in the 70's. And there's monsters. Not often. Oh, and it is written with a literary head. Anyway, I am good with the genre of spec fic and fantasy. But I am struggling to think about who might rep it based on their repping history. Same thing for the, it would appeal to readers of.... The MC's abilities are quite similar to those of the MC in R. Scott Bakker's books. But that is effectively a magic system (based in philosophy, but still...). Aside from that, what ought I be thinking of? I have included my QL below to give you a better indication of things.
#2 Related to the above. When I tell friends the premise, that is, when I pitch them, sure they are into it. But when I tell them what inspired the MC they absolutely light up. Unfortunately, that inspiration is a mash up of two MOVIE characters. But based on their reactions, I feel like maybe I should work it into the query. Is that breaking a rule?
Any advise would be appreciated.
Ten years ago the warrior monk Cyril Kol of the Order of Eye and Cloud caused the collapse of civilization when he exposed the corruption at his own Order’s heart. The ensuing cataclysm cost the lives of his wife and child. Or so he thought.
Since learning that they live, Kol has scoured the war-torn world in search of his family. In his distress he has lost his ability to master the hyper-perception granted by the metaphysical and martial methods of Eye and Cloud. Unable to hinder sensations, reality overwhelms him. He maintains functionality only by a steady supply from the distillery he’s rigged up in the back of his massive, wind-up, shingle-roofed schooner.
Kol’s inebriate quest for family takes a turn when he rescues Veepa, an adolescent on the run from a covetous crime boss. But if rescue means you’re responsible - and it seems to him like it must - then Kol figures the only way to assure Veepa’s safety while still pursuing his family is to take her on as a student.
Meanwhile, news of Kol’s return has reached a fanatical warlord determined to revenge The Collapse on the man who caused it. As Kol struggles to re-master of the super-sensate ability of Eye and Cloud it becomes clear that the path to his wife and child leads through the enemies of his past and a confrontation that will endanger the devoted student he has come to hold dear.
Complete at 120,000 Of Eye and Cloud is the first of a series of speculative fiction/hard fantasy.