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#1 manego90

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Posted 08 May 2017 - 07:30 PM

Hi guys! I'm still new to the site and learning my way around. I started a blog recently, aka last night, and would like you guys to go over it and give me your opinion. You can visit it at https://throughthewindowblog.com

 

Thank you for all your support! If for some reason you don't want or cant' go to the link then you can at least give me feedback on the first post I did:

 

We Were Once Gods

 

We were once Gods,
living high in the mountain tops
Free of order, roaming the free land,
The day was young, but it had yet to grow,
Giving time the opening to run aimlessly
 
But then the day grew old,
Time limited itself, order became my captor
holding me with its bare hands as time marks my new boundaries,
I now sit on a flat land with no ups and downs
Restricted to travel a day's worth abroad my new land,
Never again are we to reach our beloved land
 
The mountains were high
And the Greenland was low,
Never again we were to access our beloved land,
Foreign to us as we now know it,
But still strong in our roots
To only serve as a reminder to what kind of life we once lived,
As our only option, we helped these new Gods grow,
Nurturing the Gods because they remind us of what was once ours,
 
For we too were once in their land,
As we had fallen from the mountain tops,
They will do accordingly,
Side by side in the land where time age,
No longer in the Mountains where youth persist
For this is the life of us Gods






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