In 2010, in in a small town in southwest Iowa, and Jimmy and Jacoby Mortensen are trying to have a baby. Legally, they can tie the knot, but having a child? having a child remains elusive. But theThat journey is complicated by conservative beliefs and religious road blocks. Perhaps you could put here, that those roadblocks even exist in the surrogacy agencies that could be helping them. Through months of research, they worked to avoid agencies who flat-out refused to work with same sex-couples. The remaining agencies offer any number of reasons for rejection including 'all of our surrogates are currently working with other intended parents'. Some even include a bible verse, even if their website didn't mention LGBT couples.
I feel, the problem with Jimmy's parents is more important than the search for agencies. I agree with this poster.
After a pile of rejections, they finally get their yes and the process of finding their surrogate begins. Jimmy's been a recovering alcoholic for years and has battled depression and anxiety since his parents disowned him for being gay. Part of the process is passing psychological and medical evaluations. I'm confused, are these evaluations before being allowed to search for a surrogate or once you've found one? The most interesting thing to me is when Jimmy's parents decide to reenter his life. Why? How? What are they trying to achieve? I'd say they've got a yes and then go straight on to Jimmy's parents actions. After that you can mention that they are the root of his struggle to pass the psychological and medical evaluations. Jacoby's alcoholic dad walked before he was even born. To make matters worse, Jimmy's parents decide to reenter his life. After weeks of ignoring their attempts to communicate, they show up at the hospital where Jimmy works.
Determined to help Jimmy patch things up with his family, Why? Jacoby sets up a meeting between Jimmy and his folks.
Between bible verses and angry words flying, Jimmy's dad takes a swing and starts a fist fight. Getting arrested for assault won't help and now Jimmy's job is on the line. The hateful reunion reminds both of them why they're hell bent on being better fathers then their own were. Why is the reunion hateful? Perhaps your jeopardy is that they have to prove to themselves that they can do a better job than their own fathers but it's not obvious they can?
RESCUE ME is dual POV, LGBT contemporary fiction complete at 83,000 words. Readers of Kristen Hannah's Firefly Lane will recognize the themes of family and the struggle to make the right choices in order to achieve the ultimate goal. I don't know this book but it makes me think you're rehashing something and that it probably won't be better. I'd leave it out. Thank you for your time and consideration.
I think this probably a really interesting book but I feel you've been sidetracked in the query by the battles that we all expect i.e. the agencies etc. You can just nod at that in this summary. The really interesting part of the story, which makes it unique, is the family dynamic and the struggle the men have to prove to themselves that they are 'worthy'. I'd pay more time to brining that to the fore. I'd love to read your next iteration of this!