Since I wasn't improving much on the old draft (post #59, bottom of page 3), I decided to start from scratch again. If this version is worse, please tell me and I'll try to edit my old draft again.
*THE NEW DRAFT IS HERE*
Dear literary agent,After losing his memories because of a spell, all Zadok wants is to live a normal life, but that can never be the case with magic, mythical creatures, and – well – the war.A few monster’s strongholds have some of Zadok’s memories in a box, waiting to be opened. To get his memories back, he must head straight towards the battles. The Millennium – a group of elite warriors that found him – train him for the war, but no one gets him ready for everything waiting for him: the death surrounding everything, the mysteries of the Millennium, and the betrayal from his family.But the more Zadok remembers his past, the more he realizes how much of his life isn’t his. He has been controlled by the enemies on the other side of the battle lines. Every time he gets close to defeating them, they find a way to rob him of all his memories again. This time, Zadok’s determined to end this war. If he wants him and his new friends to stay alive, winning is the only option.MEMORIES FORGOTTEN is a YA fantasy/adventure novel complete at 105,000 words.Thank you for your time and consideration.
It's not quite hitting home at the moment. It needs a different start, but I can't say what it should look like. So it's like a fantasy memento? That's a very unusual concept. The title is good. Magical Amnesiac might be a good title. Or Magical Flashbacks.