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#1 WriterSteph816

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Posted 11 June 2017 - 01:38 PM

 "Statistics show that 42% of marriages end in divorce, marriage isn't the hearts and flowers you see on TV. Forever Yours is a gripping look at a marriage within the first year, a young couple learning to live together and overcome obstacles such as alcoholism and infertility. Throughout their journey they learn about themselves, each other and find the strength to make their marriage last." 

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#2 Aightball

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Posted 12 June 2017 - 10:19 AM

 "Statistics show that 42% of marriages end in divorce, marriage isn't the hearts and flowers you see on TV. Forever Yours is a gripping look at a marriage within the first year, a young couple learning to live together and overcome obstacles such as alcoholism and infertility. Throughout their journey they learn about themselves, each other and find the strength to make their marriage last." 

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That sounds like my guys if I wrote the book about how they got together!  O.O 

 

But all that aside...this doesn't tell me much about your book.  I see your last two sentences are about the story but how are you going to make your book stand out on a pitch day?  See if you can spice things up a bit...something like:  Marriage isn't all hearts and flowers. [MC] battles the bottle, infertility, and learning to live together to try and beat the odds between divorce and success #Romance #A

 

Or something like that...I don't know your book, so that's a stab in the dark.  But you want it to be quick, concise, and make it stand out.  And make sure you have rooms for your hashtags, too =). 

 

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Most girls are made of
sugar and spice and everything nice; they
screwed up the recipe for me: I'm made of
bat wings and broken things.

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#3 kathleenq

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Posted 10 July 2017 - 02:42 PM

 "Statistics show that 42% of marriages end in divorce, marriage isn't the hearts and flowers you see on TV. (I would only use one of these two parts as an opener, they don't really go together and not really necessary) Forever Yours is a gripping look at a marriage within the first year, a young couple learning to live together and overcome obstacles such as alcoholism and infertility. Throughout their journey they learn about themselves, each other and find the strength to make their marriage last." 

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It's a good start, but should be shortened. I do think Aightball's example sounds catchier and tighter


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