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Chloe knew about unwritten rules; she grew up in a house full of them. But she didn’t expect that breaking one would be life changing.
No one in her immediate family had ever questioned her bullying father’s household regime. But when his neglect landed her mother in the hospital, Chloe took the rest of the day off from her Soho job and headed to her parent’s house to confront him. She knew it wouldn’t be easy, but she wasn't expecting to march into his study and find him wearing a cerise silk dress.
Chloe's discovery of her father's secret is so unexpected that she panics with deadly consequences. I'd like to know what the deadly consequences are. Seems a little vague. I think if you expound upon this, it would benefit you. What exactly is at stake?
THE UNLIKELY SOUVENIR, explores themes of gender and sexuality and how the rules we live by both define and confine us. It is a work of Women's Commercial Fiction that is complete at 80,000 words.
I am a former Reporter, Correspondent, and Editor, for television and radio.
This looks good. The only part that threw me off was the "deadly consequences."
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