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My Life, My Bipolar Girlfriend and My Shrink


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#1 lake

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Posted 17 June 2017 - 08:40 AM

You know, the part in The Wizard of Oz where the Lion, Scarecrow and Tin Man go into the forest and see the sign, ‘I’d turn back if I were you?’ Every time I watched that movie with when I was a kid, I yelled at them to ‘turn back.’ I mean, why risk their life for a girl? And now, I’m risking my life for a girl. Not ‘just’ any girl but popular, smart, beautiful, and 'crazy' Holly Vine Gardener.

 

 

If we never meet in preschool, I wouldn’t be waiting here for Dr. ‘Shrink’ Saunders, to ‘cure’ me.  Can a person actually get another person to ‘forget’ the last thirteen years? He is charging me parents $200 an hour; maybe he can do something. Joke - The thing is, I don’t want to forget Holly. I want to be with her, and she wants to be with me; psycho ward of not.


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#2 Niambi

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Posted 18 June 2017 - 10:26 PM

I'm not sure if you are posting in the right forum of if this is a hook.

If it is a sample of your hook, I'm sorry but I don't understand.

What's the story about?

#3 kathleenq

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Posted 10 July 2017 - 02:37 PM

It's catchy, but there needs to be more information after both of these (I'm assuming they're separate examples?) for them to make sense. They sound like beginnings of paragraphs or summaries, not standalone hooks.


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