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#1 lake

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Posted 17 June 2017 - 08:43 AM

My Life, My Bipolar Girlfriend, and My Shrink


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Posted 05 July 2017 - 03:57 PM

I would say it's more interesting than either one of the two.  

 

Have you thought about reordering the subjects?  The way it's written now doesn't roll off the tongue as easily as:

 

"My Life, My Shrink, and My Bipolar Girlfriend."






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