Updated query is found in #26. Thanks to all of you lovely writers out there for your help. :) I am happy to return the favor of query review if you leave your link in your response! I feel like I am getting close to having a finished product, but it seems like you could edit forever. How did you know when your query was submission ready?
Hello everyone here is my first attempt at a query for my debut novel whose title is still pending! Thank you all for considering reading and giving feedback!
Hundreds of years ago, a new race was born when a mysterious force, the gift, entered the world, bestowing upon its recipient a magic so powerful she could make her every wish come true. Now, 18-year-old Natalia Landen, one of the last surviving members of the gifted race, must utilize her powers to battle unspeakable evil in order to save her family and the world.
From the outside, Natalia Landen appears to be like every other teenager, but behind the façade she harbors a secret. A secret that if discovered could get her killed. Her powers make her strong, giving her the ability to wish for almost anything she desires, but they also make her a target. With its passing from generation to generation, the gift transformed to have potential for purity or for wickedness dependent on who wields its power. Having fallen into darkness, the Jamisons are a family which embodies everything evil about the gift, seeking out and murdering anyone who stands between them and the domination they hunger for. Fearing that she and her sister Janni may be the only two people who can stop the Jamisons, Natalia must overcome doubt and fear, trusting in the mysterious voice that guides her, to save a dark and troubled world. The two sisters must band together, along with some unlikely heroes, to overcome against all odds. I have a Master of Science degree in Speech-Language Pathology. Writing has been a hobby of mine since I was a young girl, constantly inspired by my grandparents, published authors Peter and Carolyn Harstad. As an undergraduate student I took a creative writing class which encouraged me to complete my debut novel (TITLE PENDING), a young adult fantasy complete at 56,7000 words which will appeal to fans of Divergent and The Hunger Games. Thank you for your time and consideration. A full manuscript is available upon request. I look forward to the prospect of working with you. Best regards, Kathryn Mancewicz