Like the title says, I have a sentence in the beginning of a story I'm writing... And it sounds wrong, (to me, no one has actually told me that is wrong...but I keep looking at it and something seems off) but I can't figure out WHY it sounds wrong.
Here's the sentence:
"The soft clicking of the seconds melding with the hypnotic flickering of the torches produced a drowse-inducing aura around the place; Jane loved it."
A little context: Jane is inside a tower with a huge clock on the top floor, the clicking refers to that.
My question is: it's actually wrong somehow, hard to understand or poorly worded? or is it just me?
Thanks in advance for your help!