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#1 RSMellette

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Posted 30 June 2017 - 12:02 AM

Here's a good editing game.

 

I'll offer a word that should be used sparingly in a manuscript. Tell us how many times that word shows up. Then you offer a word that should just, really, totally, like, be cut.

 

Let's start:

 

Suddenly 

 

MS Word says I've used this 18 times out of 75,000 words... I think I can do better.

 

How many times did you use Suddenly?  What word should I search for?


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#2 Michael Steven

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Posted 30 June 2017 - 03:25 AM

I have 6 appearances of "suddenly" in Accusations and Innocence (114K words).  Sudden is a word I hunt for and exterminate as often as possible.  I could rework those 6 instances, but sometimes the word works.  That's the hard part.  Getting too edit happy with certain words.
 
Anyway, how about this for another one to reduce:
 
Very
 
I have 39 appearances in Accusations and Innocence.  It is also a word I hunt for and exterminate.  I could probably cull a few more of them although many are figures of speech types of usage.  e.g. "At the very least the Watch Commander would be interested."


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Posted 01 July 2017 - 02:04 PM

"Very" is definitely very cuttable. :)

 

I have 167 out of 75K.  My defense right now is that it's a story narrated by a teenage girl, so technically, the whole thing is dialogue... still, I'll have to look into each of those - which brings me to another weak word...

 

Look

 

Holly cow! 314 of those.

 

Work. Work. Work.


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Posted 01 July 2017 - 03:18 PM

Only 2 instance of "suddenly" and 8 instances of "very" in A MURDER FOR THE BOOKS. Not too bad!



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Posted 01 July 2017 - 06:22 PM

19 suddenly's

183 very's

93K total words.

 

I suppose I should work on that...


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Posted 02 July 2017 - 12:14 AM

I found 135 "look" although five of them were "overlook."  I may have to revisit that one ... again.

 

For another insidious word, how about:

 

Seem

 

I have 22 instances of that.  Not bad, and I've edited those a number of times.


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