After working on my query letter, I've written and re-written a synopsis to go with it. I'd love your feedback.
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A Practitioner's Guide to Love and Magick
Practitioner of the magic arts Jesse Demir works as an occult consultant for pulpy horror movies in modern day Los Angeles. Jesse is ecstatic after landing a job on Christmas slasher flick, "Ho Ho Hell 2," but when a mysterious new practitioner tries to summon a demon on set, Jesse is forced to face a debt from the past. Jesse owes his life to supernatural forces, and unless he can uncover the dark practitioner and stop her from summoning his unholy creditors, he’s a dead man walking.
To make matters worse, a spell gone wrong forces lone-wolf Jesse is to take on an apprentice, to train and eventually sacrifice. Unfortunately, Jesse’s new apprentice Donny is an awkward teen, more concerned with getting a date than getting a wand. Struggling to stay afloat in the world of the occult, Jesse turns to “A Practitioner's Guide” for help, a handbook full of tips and tricks to train a sorcerer.
To get the tools they need to hunt the dark practitioner, Jesse and Donny hire eccentric occult saleswoman, Betty. Jesse and Betty hit it off, but low-life Jesse is too focused on his debt and ambitions for any serious commitment.
Sleuthing through the supernatural underbelly of Los Angeles, Jesse discovers that the black practitioner is a member of the movie crew. While Jesse sets out to find and kill the practitioner, Donny begins to come out of his shell, bonding with red-head Personal assistant Callie, developing as both a mage and a person.
After pinpointing the summoner, Jesse is captured by devoutly religious Templars, hell bent on executing wizards. Jesse escapes, but in the panic his apprentice is kidnapped by supernatural forces, the teen’s crush revealed as the dark practitioner. The PA worked with Jesse’s former mentor to trap the duo.
Jesse is devastated over the betrayal, and he is more determined stop the summoning. Jesse dukes it out with his former mentor and frees the apprentice, but fails to stop the summoning in time. The demon arrives in Los Angeles.
At first Jesse flees, but ultimately returns to face his past. Team Jesse suffers heavy losses, and soon, the wizard comes face to face with his enemy. Jesse takes a chance and makes a high stakes deal with the monster, betting on himself in a duel with the creature. Guided by a last minute scheme and a newfound faith in others, Jesse manages to trick the demon, casting it out of the physical plane.
With his demon creditors gone and his friends safe, Jesse finally commits to a relationship with Betty, and recognizes that there’s more to life than magic, glory, and spells. Plus, the wizard becomes something of a minor celebrity after the occult incident hits the tabloids.
Though Donny is still sad over the loss of his crush, he has found a place in the world of the occult, and with Jesse by his side, will continue to grow. Although the supernatural gets bolder and bolder each day, Jesse will continue to do his best to maintain balance, in both LA’s occult scene and in his personal life.