Hey! This is a first draft and very rough. It's really mostly what I used as my outline before sitting down to write the actual manuscript. I wanted to know if this makes sense, if I'm heading into the right direction...
Yeah, I think it's kinda long, too. If you have suggestions on what to cut, that'd be awesome! <3
Also, please tell me if you want me to critique back your own synopsis! :)
Seventeen-year-old OLIVIA TAYLOR lives in an empty coffee shop and is forbidden to go out by her aunt. The shop is the only living place she knows, since she’s been locked there since she was two. However, Olivia hears a boy inside her head, telling her about his miserable life and his desire to kill himself. Upon trying to answer him, she discovers he can hear her too.
Determined, she tries to convince her aunt to let her go, seek whoever is speaking to her. She gets help from the twins that work at the coffee shop, explaining that she hears a voice inside her head. When she brings the issue with her aunt, the woman tells her she has no brother and starts locking the door of the shop. Olivia spends a few days looking for the keys with the twins, but to no use. When she is close to trying to crack open the windows with sheer force, the twins find the key inside a fake book.
She says goodbye to the twins and exits the shop in the middle of the night. The twins make Olivia promise to look for their mother, with whom they were separated from when they were two-months-old, though.
However, when Olivia gets outside, it’s to find a dark place, with no lights and no stars and nothing at all.
She spends hours there, regretting her choices and trying to find a way back to the shop. Just when it's unbearable, she hears singing from the boy’s voice again, and the world starts becoming colorful and beautiful.
After fainting in her world, she wakes up in another, confused, disoriented and with an IV connected to her arm. In a hospital. She is told she was in a coma, and the doctors promise to get her family there as soon as possible.
Soon, another one of her aunts appears, along with a cousin—who is actually JACOB ALLEN, the boy inside her head. Surprisingly, she still hears him humming inside her head.
When she asks about her other aunt, she is told that woman is dead for a long time. Olivia doesn't remember anything, but she is also told she has been in a coma since she was two, where her aunt died in a car crash and she got in the hospital. Her father died there, too, but her mother ran away after everything that happened.
After she’s released from the hospital, Jacob invites Olivia to go with him graffiti the city along with two friends, and Olivia adores one of them. The other, Jacob tells her, is someone he has feelings for.
However, despite what Olivia believes, Jacob is still unhappy and still wishes to end his life. He tries it using his mother’s sleeping pills, but Olivia and her aunt are able to save him. For months, Olivia accompanies Jacob in therapy, trying to make him see that life is worth it. With the help of Jacob’s closest friends, Olivia manages to put him back on his feet.
Later, a journalist comes to Olivia, interested in her story. Olivia tells her all about it, and soon it’s in the news. But to her surprise, Olivia learns that Jacob was in the car as well, but survived without a scratch. They assume this why they have a connection, why they can hear each other’s thoughts.
Unfortunately, she also learns that the twins who lived with her in the coffee shop are dead, killed in the car crash that got her in a coma. With the help of one of Jacob’s friends, she finds the twins’ mom and tells the woman about her time with her daughters. The woman is frightened, and runs away from her.
On the day of her accident, the twins’ mom comes to see her again, though, and the two grieve together. After speaking with the woman, Olivia decides to forgive her aunt for killing the twins.
Along with Jacob, Olivia finds a happy life. They start a routine, working at the gym and graffitiing the city. Olivia gets a job in an ice cream parlor. Jacob, on the other hand, starts dating the boy he loves, with the support and approval of his family and friends.