Jynnete and Katy, 20, have been best friends for over a decade—but after a racially-motivated shooting occurs at the
Merson Valley, California their college, they start to get pulled in opposing directions (can you think of a strong word than opposing directions? their friendship starts fraying or is torn apart (some kind of turn a phrase).. The BFF's have always been something of an odd couple: Katy is emotional and energetic, free-spirited and sensitive, and looking to break into fashion; Jynnete is a thinker with an angry streak pursuing a chemistry degree, and considers herself a Christian feminist. (this is a bit of telling. It would be interesting if you could show how they think differently through some examples perhaps) Their differences are perhaps nowhere more evident than in their dating lives, with Katy's regular heartbreak and tears pushing Jynnete toward the role of her protector. And now, with Jynnete having just seethingly dumped her latest boyfriend, she's feeling more frustrated than ever—ready to throw in the towel and swear off men forever.
But in the wake of the shooting, with their community turned upside down and students turning out in droves to attend the college's “End Prejudice Campaign,” very little can be taken for granted. While a seemingly (hmmm this makes me think he's not all he portrays himself to be. Explain more of this or cut) great guy falls into Jynnete's lap, Katy's newest boyfriend is practically the worst guy around (how is he bad? I would like more details)—at least in Jynnete's eyes. For one of the first times in her life Jynnete feels powerless, watching as he leads Katy in almost every perilous direction that she had tried to help her avoid. (good...ties back to being her protector).
Katy begins to contemplate marriage, while Jynnete struggles with increasing zeal (I don't think zeal is the right word here) to break Katy free, and soon tensions flare and accusations of prejudice (wait is her new boyfriend a different race than her? This would be important to mention given the shooting) fly.
All around them schisms open up among the Merson Valley locals, with business boycotts, a mayoral recall election, and even riots just on the horizon.(This is like a list - might want to cut as it's not central to their conflict) And in her own life, as Jynnete battles to retain stability and normalcy, she feels herself being driven away from her friends, her new boyfriend, her beliefs, and more, even as untold stories send them all careening down still more uncertain paths. (This last line is too vague. Again, I feel like this is a laundry list. Maybe pick one defining event that is tearing Jynnete apart. A little confusing too since you said in the 2nd paragraph she has a great boyfriend).
SHALLOW WORLD: A SUNNY-THORNED SEED FOR THE UNTOLD STORIES is a
fast-paced New Adult romance hybrid (at X Words). In 2006 I was one of 12 candidates selected out of hundreds as a copywriter for a financial institution. After a year as a copywriter life led me down other paths, but I've now returned to my love of writing once more.
Best friends Jynnete and Katy, both 20 and recent enrollees at California's Merson Valley Community College, are something of an odd couple. Katy is emotional and energetic, free-spirited and compassionate, and trying to break into fashion, while Jynnete is a thinker, pursuing a chemistry degree, and considers herself a Christian feminist. Their perspectives on life often collide, but perhaps nowhere more than in their dating lives, sometimes bringing anger and disapproval from Jynnete, tears from Katy. And having just dumped her own latest boyfriend, Jynnete's now feeling more frustrated than ever, ready to throw in the towel and swear off men forever.
But then a racially-motivated shooting occurs at their college and the community is turned upside down, with students turning out in droves to attend the college's “End Prejudice Campaign.” Schisms open up among the locals, and soon business boycotts, a mayoral recall election, and even riots seem just on the horizon.
Yet for Jynnete and Katy it will go far beyond all this even. While a seemingly great guy falls into Jynnete's lap, Katy starts contemplating marriage with practically the worst guy around—at least in Jynnete's eyes. Tensions flare and accusations of prejudice fly as Jynnete pushes harder and harder to get him out of Katy's life, and untold stories send them and their friends careening down ever more uncertain paths.
SHALLOW WORLD: A SUNNY-THORNED SEED FOR THE UNTOLD STORIES is a New Adult romance hybrid. In 2006 I was one of 12 candidates selected out of hundreds as a copywriter for a financial institution. After a year as a copywriter life led me down other paths, but I've now returned to my love of writing once more.
Tour a slice of life, from Jynnete, Katy, and more, as they face the new challenges brought on by college, romances, adulthood—and the school shooting that precipitates the untold stories that dwarf it all.
Best friends Jynnete and Katy, both 20 and recent enrollees at the Merson Valley Community College in California's Central Valley, are something of an odd couple. Katy is emotional and energetic, free-spirited, compassionate, and fun-loving. Jynnete is mostly a thinker, more scientific-minded, and considers herself a Christian feminist, though she also knows to let her hair down at times. Their contrasting perspectives, personalities, and stances toward romance sometimes bring them and their other friends into disagreement or even conflict—but mostly their relationships are harmonious, if colorful.
But shortly after they've returned from Winter Break and only one semester into college, much of their world changes in a day. Without any warning, a racially-motivated shooting occurs at their college, leaving four dead in the wake. The community is turned upside down, and students turn out in droves to attend the college's “End Prejudice Campaign.”
Schisms begin to open up among the locals, tensions start to flare and accusations start to fly—and it's not long before business boycotts, a mayoral recall election, and even riots seem to be just on the horizon in what had been a quiet center of tourism and agriculture.
Yet for Jynnete and Katy it will go far beyond all this even, with still more surprising and explosive revelations in their personal lives and those close to them, as untold stories send them careening down ever more uncertain paths.
SHALLOW WORLD: A SUNNY-THORNED SEED FOR THE UNTOLD STORIES part 1 is a New Adult romance hybrid, coming in at 121,792 words. In 2006 I was one of 12 candidates selected out of hundreds as a copywriter for a financial institution. After a year as a copywriter life led me down other paths, but I've now returned to my love of writing once more.
I'm seeking the right agent/publisher for my book, Shallow World: A Sunny-Thorned Seed for the Untold Stories. It's one of those unique sorts of books that, at a casual glance, might seem likely to alienate most readers, even among its core audience. I fear as such that most publishers would, by default, try to relegate it to some obscure corner of the publishing world, if not shy away altogether. But in fact, I believe it would be very successful and likely experience near-universal appeal after getting some traction. How so?
Imagine, for example, a historical drama, set in the midst of hundreds of people drowning and freezing to death, and featuring a high-profile centerpiece of blatant female nudity—and yet I insisted to you that the story would perform better with school-age girls than anyone. Or, a second example: a story on a planet in a distant star system, featuring nudity and strange sexual customs of aliens that are under assault by human aggressors—and again I felt younger females would be one of its strongest audiences. In response, some might tell me that these elements seem far too incongruous, and such tales might be best confined to smaller indie crowds, such as history aficionados or sci-fi enthusiasts, and that perhaps I even ought to have my head examined if I seriously thought such stories would be well-suited to young women above all.
However, the descriptions I have provided are of Titanic and Avatar, two of the highest-grossing movies of all time. Unique, but somehow they worked.
So, when I tell you that I've spun a high-energy romance-hybrid with an intellectual bent, touching to greater or lesser degrees on shootings, homelessness, polyamory, gender, homosexuality, gun ownership, relationships and dating, prejudice, feminism, spirituality and religion, politics, philosophy, love, and more; and while I think the book will have a wide-reaching draw, I believe it would be best-suited to young women—I hope you can grant me the benefit of the doubt.
Shallow World is a New Adult drama/comedy/romance dipping into the lives of best friends Jynnete and Katy, both 20 years old. The initial focus is their experiences with college, jobs, new cars, apartments, relationships with friends and boyfriends—until their lives are turned on their heads after a racially-motivated shooting at their local college, slingshotting both girls toward completely new events and revelations, and the unknown.
I think many people will dislike a number of things in my book, but I also think there is far more to appreciate about Shallow World. It is probably the most engaging, entertaining, and relevant book I could have written at this time; it's a book that I believe needed to be written, and I hope you'll find it's a book that needs to be read. Read with an open mind, and I expect this story will bring enjoyment and new value into your life and the lives of all those it touches.