See post #4.
I've agonized over how to start my novel, and I thought I had a good hook at the beginning of chapter 1. Now I'm unsure. The following are two options I'm considering. Please tell me if one, both, or neither of them spark your interest. All I need in reply is "1" or "2" or "1 + 2" or "neither".
1. If Stammnon had any foresight, even a hint, he'd keep his younger brother in the shepherds’ encampment that evening and avoid the bloodshed to follow. But Stammnon’s senses remained blind to the future, mired in the dusk of his uncelebrated twentieth birthday, the fall equinox. Father forgot, again, or didn’t care–more likely the latter.
2. Later that evening, when summer turned to fall, Stammnon would long to roll back time’s scroll. With but a little foresight, he’d have kept his brother in the shepherds’ encampment and avoided such bloodshed. But Stammnon was no seer. His thoughts remained mired in the dusk of his uncelebrated twentieth birthday. Father had forgotten, or didn’t care–more likely the latter.