Here are three pitches for my new adult urban fantasy novel. I used these on #SFFPit and got a few responses. I'd like to use the best one (with some touching up) for pitch wars. Which do you like best, and how can I improve??
As always, critique me, and I'll brutally critique you!
1 - When a mysterious a demon appears on set, wizard and movie consultant, Jesse Demir, is dragged back into the world of the occult.
2 - Knee deep in soul-crushing debt to supernatural forces, occult master and movie consultant J. Demir is forced to take on an apprentice.