Alright, I've put this off for long enough. My experience writing a synopsis is little to none, so any help or advice anyone can offer would be great. I definitely want to tighten this up and get the flow down, it just doesn't feel right as is. Thanks in advance for any help you can offer and I'd be happy to return the favor.
Sam Hain deals with monsters, whatever that may mean. He’s killed shape-shifters, bargained with demons, and cast undead back to oblivion. It’s his life’s work, because someone has to do it.
Amanda Michaels comes to him after her son, Bryan, has been missing for months. The police are at a dead end and have given up. It’s a story he’s heard before. No one comes to him as a first option. She also informs him that Bryan isn’t the first child to disappear in Lurnley, Missouri. A dozen or more other children have vanished in the last half-century.
Sam dives into the town’s history and discovers the disappearances began after a disaster in the mine that claimed nearly thirty lives. Digging deeper into Bryan himself he finds a journal account of the boy’s encounter with a girl with eyes as black as night. The description of her sounds eerily similar to the girl who vanished before Bryan. Speaking to the few locals who will talk to him, Sam learns that black-eyed children have appeared to the other kids who vanished.
Clearly the mine, the black-eyed kids, and the missing children are connected. With the help of a local reporter, Sam descends into the mine. There they stumble onto a monster unlike anything Sam has ever seen, a rarity in itself. The monster kills his new ally in a blink, gutting him and fleeing before Sam can react.
Sam retreats to the surface where he runs into the town sheriff, who is understandably suspicious. He tells the sheriff the truth of what happened and they return to the mine to find the reporter’s body missing and no sign of the monster. The sheriff arrests Sam.
He escapes from his cell with ease. It isn’t the first time he’s been locked up. He returns to the mine to learn more about the monster, hoping to discover a way to kill it. The sheriff finds him again, more amused than angry about his escape. Together, they delve into the mine, going deeper than before.
Sam locates the monster in its lair. The exact site of the collapse that set everything in motion. The creature doesn’t kill him. Instead, it taunts him and toys with him until he loses consciousness, waking up in the local hospital. The sheriff rescued him. He bears only a mark on his arms from the creature’s touch.
Over the course of the night, the blackness left on his arms begins to spread, rendering him weaker with every passing hour. The creature’s corruption also forged a connection between them. Sam can feel it probing his mind, and more still, can see what the black-eyed children see. They are connected through the creature.
Another child from town is taken, Bryan’s friend Tommy. Using his new link with the children and the creature, Sam and the sheriff track them down. Along the way Sam discovers the creature’s influence has left him with a debilitating weakness: light. Tiny amounts of light cause him unbearable agony.
He and the sheriff just miss the children, a step behind them, as the sheriff planned. He attacks Sam, revealing the monster corrupted and took control of him years ago. He is part of the reason the investigations of the kidnappings go nowhere. They struggle, with him nearly crushing Sam’s skull, but Sam manages to kill the sheriff.
Determined to kill the monster once and for all, to save himself as well as the children, he gathers what weapons he has left and returns to the mine.
Light hurts him, maybe it will hurt the monster too.
Sam returns to the thing’s nest in the deepest pit of the mine. The creature uses the children to attack him. He quickly realizes he has no choice but to fight them if he’s to have any chance of stopping this nightmare for good.
He fights his way past the kids to the monster itself. His body failing and his few weapons spent, Sam manages to weaken the monster enough to kill it. Not all the children survive, but he does keep his promise to Bryan’s mother. He brings her boy home.