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#1 dizzywriter

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Posted 26 July 2017 - 07:51 PM

Archaeologist Cristina Smythe must decipher mysterious emails in a prehistoric language to find the stranger who tried to kill her.



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Posted 01 August 2017 - 06:01 PM

I actually like this...it's short, not too wordy... but can you change "tried" to "tries?" Present tense makes the problem sound ongoing, therefore more urgent.



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Posted 03 August 2017 - 12:55 PM

Nice job!  You certainly hooked me.


“We must always take sides. Neutrality helps the oppressor, never the victim. Silence encourages the tormentor, never the tormented.” ― Elie Wiesel

 

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#4 Spiffy McBang

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Posted 09 August 2017 - 05:38 PM

I actually like this...it's short, not too wordy... but can you change "tried" to "tries?" Present tense makes the problem sound ongoing, therefore more urgent.

 

In that case I think it would be 'is trying'. 'Tries' almost sounds like she's deciphering the emails before the attempt on her life, as well as after.






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